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You have recently bought a Telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine shows you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most v.2

You have recently bought a Telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine shows you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most v. 2
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing this letter to talk about the problem of the Telephone, which I bought yesterday on your e-commercial website. According to posted information, the cell phone is supposedly able to provide list unread messages and miss calls, in which user could choose any one to reply. However, it did not work like that. Specifically, only the latest one is displayed on the screen. As the result, I lost almost my historic incoming messages and miss calls so that I could not answer them. I am very disappointed about your two-year-warranty product with publicly disclosed false functions on Internet. Due to the difference between the product I bought and that advertised on your website. I would like to return it and propose a full refund via credit card I had purchased. Please give me the detail of your address so that I could send it back to you. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Faithfully yours,
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter to talk about the problem of the Telephone, which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
yesterday on your e-commercial website.

According to posted information, the cell phone is
supposedly
able to provide list unread messages and miss calls, in which user could choose
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
to reply.
However
, it did not work like that.
Specifically
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the latest one
is displayed
on the screen. As the result, I lost almost my historic incoming messages and miss calls
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I could not answer them.

I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
disappointed about your two-year-warranty product with
publicly
disclosed false functions on Internet. Due to the difference between the product I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
and that advertised on your website. I would like to return it and propose a full refund via credit card I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
give me the detail of your address
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it back to you.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Faithfully
yours,
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently bought a Telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine shows you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
162 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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