Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Write a letter to the Manager, as an employee, some suggestions for the development of hotel. what are all the problems you think, what are all the developments you recommend. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows v.1

Write a letter to the Manager, as an employee, some suggestions for the development of hotel. what are all the problems you think, what are all the developments you recommend. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows v. 1
Dear Martin, As you might aware, I am one of the oldest employee in this hotel and seen the hotel rising from two star to five star. This gives me a sense of satisfaction and feels privilege to be part of this adventures journey. In recent times, different problems surfaced and I would like to bring into your notice. First of all, in last six month, attrition of employee at middle level has become very high, resulting, severe resource crunch in operation department. I recently heard that one customer clearly noticed it and mentioned in the feedback. Besides, we only offer limited styles of food at our restaurant which sometime does not meet the expectation of customer. In comparison to our hotel, others hotel in vicinity offers five time more varieties in break-fast and full course meal. I believe that if these issues are continued then it may impact the hotel’s reputation. Therefore I recommend that employee at all levels require motivation and team building session. This will help the co-ordination among departments. For Food area, more chefs may be hired or existing chefs should be asked to get hands-on on international cousins that will help to achieve customers liking in food and beverage section. I am sure this issues and recommendations will give some insight and help to resolve issues. Yours sincerely, Poonam
Dear Martin,

As you might aware, I am one of the oldest employee in this
hotel
and
seen
the
hotel
rising from two star to five star. This gives me a sense of satisfaction and feels privilege to be part of this adventures journey. In recent times,
different
problems surfaced and I would like to bring into your notice.

First of all
, in last six month, attrition of employee at middle level has become
very
high, resulting, severe resource crunch in operation department. I recently heard that one customer
clearly
noticed it and mentioned in the feedback.
Besides
, we
only
offer limited styles of food at our restaurant which sometime does not
meet
the expectation of customer.
In comparison
to our
hotel
, others
hotel
in vicinity offers five time more
varieties in
break-
fast
and
full course
meal.

I believe that if these issues
are continued
then it may impact the
hotel’s
reputation.
Therefore
I recommend that employee at all levels require motivation and team building session. This will
help
the co-ordination among departments. For Food area, more chefs may
be hired
or existing chefs should
be asked
to
get
hands-on on international cousins that will
help
to achieve customers liking in food and beverage section.

I am sure
this
issues and recommendations will give
some
insight and
help
to resolve issues.

Yours
sincerely
,

Poonam
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Language is the blood of the soul into which thoughts run and out of which they grow.
Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the Manager, as an employee, some suggestions for the development of hotel. what are all the problems you think, what are all the developments you recommend. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
223 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts