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You are a student at an English language school and are living in private accommodation with other students from the school. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Wr v.2

You are a student at an English language school and are living in private accommodation with other students from the school. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Wr v. 2
Dear Mr. Eills, I am writing on behalf of all the students at your property at 38 New Street. As you know that we have not had hot water and heating system for last two months. We appreciate that you sent the workmen to rectify the situation, but the fact is that they have not been successful, despite spending a lot of time on the problems. Up to now, the focus has been on repairing the hot water boiler and heating system. However, both of these are quite old. Therefore, we think that boiler and heating system need to be replaced, rather than relying on repairs that do not work or may only keep them in working condition for a limited time. One of us has a friend who works part-time for plumbing company. His friend and colleagues have taken a look at the problem and the problem and they have provided us with a quote for the necessary work. The price seems very reasonable and they are sure that they can get the work done by the end of this week. We hope that you will agree to this solution as we enjoy living here and we think that you want to be as helpful as possible. Yours sincerely Ntp
Dear Mr.
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Eills
,

I am writing on behalf of all the students at your property at 38 New Street.

As you know that we have not had hot
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water
and heating system for last two months. We appreciate that you
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sent
the workmen to rectify the situation,
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but
the fact is that they have not been successful, despite spending
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a lot of
time on the problems.

Up to
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now
, the focus has been on repairing the hot water boiler and heating system.
However
, both of these are quite
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old
.
Therefore
, we
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think
that boiler and heating system need to
be replaced
,
rather
than relying on repairs that do not
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work
or may
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only
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keep
them in working condition for a limited time.

One of us has a friend who works part-time for plumbing
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company
. His friend and colleagues have taken a look at the problem and the
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problem and
they have provided us with a quote for the necessary
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work
. The price seems
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
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reasonable and
they are sure that they can
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get
the
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work
done by the
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end
of this week.

We hope that you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to this solution as we enjoy living
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here and
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that you want to be as helpful as possible.

Yours
sincerely


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Ntp
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You are a student at an English language school and are living in private accommodation with other students from the school. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Wr v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
210 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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