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You have been asked by a good friend to be his/her marriage witness. The wedding will take place on a working day which means you will have to take a day off from work. However, you have recently started working at this company and do not have leave time. v.2

You have been asked by a good friend to be his/her marriage witness. The wedding will take place on a working day which means you will have to take a day off from work. However, you have recently started working at this company and do not have leave time. v. 2
Dear Ram, I have no words to express my gratitude for your kind offer to cover me on next Friday at work. I was not expecting the friend’s wedding at weekdays but marriage registrar fixed the date on Friday. As you know, mainly I am involved in client interaction and our client M/S Rodrigo schedule a meeting on next Friday. The main agenda in the meeting will be presentation from our side and for that I have already prepared the power point slides and proposal. Though, presentation is simple, I have compiled all the previous communication with Rodrigo representative. In fact, I have informed to client as well about my unavoidable leave and requested to co-operate with you. I am sending you the power point files in email and will have internal meeting at Thursday in order to clear any doubts you have. I am grateful to you that you saved me and commitments made to my friend would be honored by me because of you. I will meet you on Monday lunch at river side café where will get an update about the meeting. In future, if you ever need my help, please ping me Best Regards, Pomu
Dear Ram,

I have no words to express my gratitude for your kind offer to cover me on
next
Friday at work. I was not expecting the friend’s wedding at weekdays
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
marriage registrar
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
the date on Friday.

As you know,
mainly
I
am involved
in client interaction and our client M/S Rodrigo schedule a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
on
next
Friday. The main agenda in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
will be presentation from our side and for that I have already prepared the
Did you mean "PowerPoint" (= Microsoft presentation software)?
power point
slides and proposal. Though, presentation is simple, I have compiled all the previous communication with Rodrigo representative. In fact, I have informed to client
as well
about my unavoidable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
and requested to co-operate with you. I am sending you the
Did you mean "PowerPoint" (= Microsoft presentation software)?
power point
files in email and will have internal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
at Thursday in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
any doubts you have.

I am grateful to you that you saved me and commitments made to my friend would
be honored
by me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of you.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you on Monday lunch at river side café where will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an update about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
.
Did you mean: "In the future"?
In future
, if you ever need my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
ping
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
me


Best Regards,

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Pomu
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have been asked by a good friend to be his/her marriage witness. The wedding will take place on a working day which means you will have to take a day off from work. However, you have recently started working at this company and do not have leave time. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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