Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

City council is planing to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen you don't want it to happen. Write a letter to a city council and sayWhat is the importance of the building? W v.2

City council is planing to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen you don't want it to happen. Write a letter to a city council and sayWhat is the importance of the building? W v. 2
Dear sir, I am writing this letter regarding to renovate our traditional buildings rather than pull it down from our town. To begin with, this building always reminding us our old historical people traditional life and it showcase their ancient art. Also, over all building will inform us their Symbol as " V" that is called victory. However many of them do not know this information and I have read one of the famous artical about this detail. Please reconsider this matter and we can collect the fund re innovate it. I read a newspaper for that last week and I have gonr through that matter about budget for tourism and development, government alloted 10 crores for this in order to this we can send a requset letter to the central government and state government to renovate this building. Also, my friend whose uncle is ministor of tourism and development so I can follow up with this to get fund quickly to re modify it. I hope, I am looking for a feedback soon. yours sincerely, john.
Dear sir,

I am writing this letter
The phrase 'regarding to' is not correct. Use "regarding" or "regard to".
regarding to
renovate our traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
rather
than pull it down from our town.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
always reminding us our
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
historical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
traditional life and it
Did you mean "showcases"?
showcase
their ancient art.
Also
, over all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
will inform us their Symbol as
Possible spelling mistake found.
&quot
;
Possible spelling mistake found.
V&quot
; that
is called
victory.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of them do not know this information and I have read one of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
Possible spelling mistake found.
artical
about this detail.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
reconsider this
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
matter and
we can collect the fund re innovate it.

I read a newspaper for that last week and I have
Possible spelling mistake found.
gonr
through that matter about budget for tourism and development,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "allotted", the past tense form of the verb 'allot'?
alloted
10 crores for this in order to this we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a
Possible spelling mistake found.
requset
letter to the central
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and state
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to renovate this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
.
Also
, my friend whose uncle is
Possible spelling mistake found.
ministor
of tourism and development
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I can follow up with this to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
fund
quickly
to re modify it.

I hope, I am looking for a feedback
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
yours
sincerely
,

john.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
Speak a new language so that the world will be a new world.
Rumi

IELTS letter City council is planing to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen you don't want it to happen. Write a letter to a city council and sayWhat is the importance of the building? W v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts