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You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: •what kind of business you want to start•how much v.4

You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: •what kind of business you want to start•how much v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inquire about the possibility of getting business loan from your bank to finance a small startup I have planned to commence soon. Let me explain in detail. I have completed my Post Graduation in Construction Management from NICMAR institute. Now I am interested to start small contracting firm and I need a loan to support it. I own the location of shop and have some prior experience in construction of residential and commercial buildings. One of my financial advisory has suggested me to invest atleast 2 Million INR. Since I can finance 40% of total investment I need your bank to finance me with balance 60% i. e. 1. 2 Million INR and that would be great help for me. Please let me know what are the documents required to apply for this loan. As I need this loan for long-term I would request if you could arrange me repayment schedule of over 5 years along with interests as per bank standards. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rakesh Soni
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about the possibility of getting business loan from your bank to finance a
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small
startup I have planned to commence
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soon
.

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Let
me
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explain
in detail. I have completed my Post Graduation in Construction Management from
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NICMAR
institute.
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Now
I
am interested
to
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start
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small
contracting firm and I need a loan to support it. I
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own
the location of shop and have
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some
prior experience in construction of residential and commercial buildings. One of my financial advisory has suggested me to invest
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atleast
2 Million INR.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
I can finance 40% of total investment I need your bank to finance me with balance 60%
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
1. 2 Million INR and that would be great
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help
for me.
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Please
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let
me know what are the documents required to apply for this loan.

As I need this loan for long-term I would request if you could arrange me repayment schedule of over 5 years along with interests as per bank standards.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Rakesh
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Soni
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: •what kind of business you want to start•how much v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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