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Write a letter to friend inviting on family function. what is the occasion, what are your plans and why is it important that she should come v.2

Write a letter to friend inviting on family function. what is the occasion, what are your plans and why is it important that she should come v. 2
Dear Sally, Hi. How are doing there? I am doing fine here at Oslo, Norway. I am writing to you because there would be an event at our house. This coming 25th of March my sister Yen is getting married with his long time boyfriend. My mother is insisting me to invite you since we already consider a part of the family. A day before the wedding I am planning a small party which includes the friend of the bride and groom. It would be fun since I am thinking of a lot of party games and also there would be a barbecue and lots of beer. So we can talk and share some of our past experiences. It is must that you should come so we can bond together and maybe we could rekindle the past. Which could benefit not just our feelings but also our sense of fulfillment with each other. You can always reach me in my phone number 123456789 or you can send me an email at nill@123mail. com. Take care and write back soon Best wishes, Bill
Dear Sally,

Hi. How are doing there? I am doing fine here at Oslo, Norway. I am writing to you
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there would be an
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event
at our
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This coming 25th of March my sister Yen is getting married with his long time boyfriend. My mother is insisting me to invite you since we already consider a part of the family.

A day
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before
the wedding I am planning a
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small
party which includes the friend of the bride and groom. It would be fun since I am thinking of
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a lot of
party games and
also
there would be a barbecue and lots of beer.
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So
we can talk and share
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some
of our
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past experiences
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must
that you should
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come
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so
we can bond together and maybe we could rekindle the past. Which could benefit not
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just
our feelings
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but
also
our sense of fulfillment with each other.

You can always reach me in my phone number 123456789 or you can
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send me an email
at nill@123mail.
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com
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Take care and write back
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soon


Best wishes,

Bill
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to friend inviting on family function. what is the occasion, what are your plans and why is it important that she should come v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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