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Your friend asked you to help him find a music teacher for his child. write a letter to your friend to tell him you have found a suitable teacher. explain why you think they are suitableAdvise your friend how to get in touch with the teacher v.1

Your friend asked you to help him find a music teacher for his child. write a letter to your friend to tell him you have found a suitable teacher. explain why you think they are suitableAdvise your friend how to get in touch with the teacher v. 1
Dear Anna, I have a wonderful news for you. As you asked me to search for a musician to teach your child. It is unbelievable, but I have found a top of the notch music teacher for your daughter. He is a true professional and has skills to play guitar, Violin, drums, trumpet, Saxophone, but have exceptional talent to play Piano. He is topper from Lahore Arts College and has been teaching children for 10 years. Additionally, I have also checked with a couple of his previous pupils and they have recommended him highly and have only praise for his instructing methods. Recently, I went in one of his class to listen to him first hand and the way he plays is mind blowing, the rhythm, the music. It is simply mesmerizing. The good thing is, he charges a nominal amount to teach children and bringing his own instruments and besides gives free musical notes. I believe, you should meet him personally, as this gives the real gist of someone’s personality, manners, thoughts and way-forward about teaching. Therefore, I have given him your mobile number and address. I hope you don’t mind. Best wishes, SAIRA
Dear Anna,

I have
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "wonderful news".
a wonderful news
for you. As you asked me to search for a musician to teach your child. It is unbelievable,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I have found a top of the notch music teacher for your daughter.

He is a true professional and has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to play guitar, Violin, drums, trumpet, Saxophone,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
have exceptional talent to play Piano. He is topper from Lahore Arts College and has been teaching children for 10 years.
Additionally
, I have
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
with a couple of his previous
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pupils and
they have recommended him
highly
and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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praise
for his instructing methods. Recently, I went in one of his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
to listen to him
first
hand and the way he plays is
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
mind blowing
, the rhythm, the music. It is
simply
mesmerizing. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
thing is, he charges a nominal amount to teach children and bringing his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
instruments and
besides
gives free musical notes.

I believe, you should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
him
personally
, as this gives the real gist of someone’s personality, manners, thoughts and way-forward about teaching.
Therefore
, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
him your mobile number and address. I hope you don’t mind.

Best wishes,

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SAIRA
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your friend asked you to help him find a music teacher for his child. write a letter to your friend to tell him you have found a suitable teacher. explain why you think they are suitableAdvise your friend how to get in touch with the teacher v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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