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using advanced technology in agriculture such as chemical fertilizers and machinery has resulted in producing more food. some people, however, think these technologies have negative effects. what are the advantages and this advantages/ v.2

using advanced technology in agriculture such as chemical fertilizers and machinery has resulted in producing more food. some people, however, think these technologies have negative effects. what are the advantages and this advantages/ v. 2
The issue of using the advanced technology in agriculture has grown in importance over the past few decades. Although this methods have impacted on the quality of production negatively, they have brought benefits for farmers in terms of convenience and quickly. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of the technology like fertilizers and machinery in the agriculture. On the one hand, many commenters are of the view that there are advantages to using the advanced technology. From their point of view, fertilizers lead products to put particle pollutants in store and it causes many diseases in human. It also mentioned recently, producing fruits and vegetables modified through genetic technology would bring unknown problems if scientists did not research on them accurately. For example, research has shown that the transfusion products are main reason of creating the new allergen. As a result, the technology will exacerbate the privilege of unknown diseases and it will obligate government to invest a great deal of money in improvement of this situation. On the other hand, there are who subscribe to view that using technology can bring several benefits. It is believed that to produce a plenty of production by tradition methods farmers should allocate many time and forces. While, by using advanced machinery not only can farmers provide more productions in less time but also the workforce needed is less. Therefore it is worth to devote on Overall, it can be said that the usage of technological systems in agriculture has become incredibly in common. It is argued that the advantages include huge amount of production in less time with less workforce while it may cause of many unknown diseases.
The issue of using the advanced
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technology
in agriculture has grown in importance over the past few decades. Although
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this
methods have impacted on the quality of
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production
negatively
, they have brought benefits for farmers in terms of convenience and
quickly
. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of the
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technology
like fertilizers and machinery in the agriculture.

On the one hand,
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many
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commenters
are of the view that there are advantages to using the advanced
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technology
. From their point of view, fertilizers lead products to put particle pollutants in store and it causes
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many
diseases in human. It
also
mentioned recently, producing fruits and vegetables modified through genetic
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technology
would bring unknown problems if scientists did not research on them
accurately
.
For example
, research has shown that the transfusion products are main reason of creating the new allergen.
As a result
, the
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technology
will exacerbate the privilege of unknown diseases and it will obligate
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government
to invest a great deal of money in improvement of this situation.

On the other hand
, there are who subscribe to view that using
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technology
can bring several benefits. It
is believed
that to produce a
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plenty
of
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production
by tradition methods farmers should allocate
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many time
and forces. While, by using advanced machinery not
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only
can farmers provide more
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productions
in
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less
time
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but
also
the workforce needed is
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less
.
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Therefore
it is worth to devote
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on


Overall
, it can
be said
that the usage of technological systems in agriculture has become
incredibly
in common. It
is argued
that the advantages include huge amount of
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production
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
less
time with
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less
workforce while it may cause of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
unknown diseases.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter using advanced technology in agriculture such as chemical fertilizers and machinery has resulted in producing more food. some people, however, think these technologies have negative effects. what are the advantages and this advantages/ v. 2

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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