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overconsumption in the modern world due to noticeable breakthroughs in machine learning, chemical and medical industries etc. v.2

overconsumption in the modern world due to noticeable breakthroughs in machine learning, chemical and medical industries etc. v. 2
The author of the statement addresses one of the most urgent subjects of our days – over-consumption in the modern world due to noticeable breakthroughs in machine learning, chemical and medical industries etc. Indeed, there has been no time in the recorded history where the path-breaking achievements in technologies have taken place, except for in the 20th century and the beginning of the 21st century. While some people may be convinced that there is no connection between modernization of lifestyle thanks to innovations and overconsumption, a number of recently published research papers argue that this is in fact a case for developed and a part of developing countries. Inevitably, it should come no surprise that the briefest reflection on daily life in abovementioned nations reveals there has been considerable growth in ways for exacerbating in consumption – a peak of manufacturing in goods, access to the Internet and consequently to a deal of web-sites and place markets, increasing the level of living and as a result excess of money. Consider, a lucid instance of enhancement in producing goods, China, country where the current production not only takes a part in precipitating of overconsumption, but as well in destroying the climate and environment. Having taken the control over the majority of industries and markets over the worlds, this country inundates the American and European markets with not high-qualities products – from plastic toys and electro mobiles to full-pesticides food. Furthermore, throughout the last decades by virtue of advances in scientific fields the quality of earnings has changed and so has the type of lifestyle – rushing, depression, devastation have already become an inseparable, integral part of lucrative workplace. Undoubtedly, the present of excess money might be estimated to be a base for overconsumption, however without these negative features of living in a big city, they would have by far less considerable impact. As well, according the latest exploration of international scientists, there are certain genes that provoke people whom own them to do impulsive purchases – from alcohol to new dress on a well-known web-market. Coming to the subject of the Internet and all benefits that are in our lives owing to it, there a solid need to point up the significant changes which have taken place over the last decades – ability to buy products, goods not only a next-to-door shop, but as well in a huge mall or even more in China directly from a producer. The accessibility and freedom in actions have made their deal – now impulsive purchases can be made over day and night without any restrictions. The formula that contains excess finance, accessibility to markets and products, our genes and desire to get rid of daily lassitude provides an explanation for overconsumption. Presumably while breakouts in different scientific spheres are a prominent player in these alterations, so are our attitude to this, enduring dispositions and indolence to looking for decisions. In conclusion, having analyzed all highlighted above aspects and given examples, it can be easily estimated that the world doesn’t stay at one spot and changes are ineluctable. While undeniably they do play prominent roles in our lives, so do our attitude to them. There is no need to retreat to the Luddite attitude to them, rather than to embrace a positive posture to innovations.
The author of the statement addresses one of the most urgent subjects of our days
over-consumption in the modern world due to noticeable breakthroughs in machine learning, chemical and medical industries etc.
Indeed
, there has been no time in the recorded history where the path-breaking achievements in technologies have taken place,
except for
in the 20th century and the beginning of the 21st century. While
some
people
may
be convinced
that there is no
connection between
modernization of lifestyle thanks to innovations and overconsumption, a number of recently published research papers argue that this is in fact a case for developed and a part of
developing countries
.

Inevitably
, it should
come
no surprise that the briefest reflection on daily life in
abovementioned
nations reveals there has been considerable growth in ways for exacerbating in consumption
a peak of manufacturing in
goods
, access to the Internet and
consequently
to a deal of web-sites and place markets, increasing the level of living and
as a result
excess of money. Consider, a lucid instance of enhancement in producing
goods
, China, country where the
current
production not
only
takes a part in precipitating of overconsumption,
but
as well
in destroying the climate and environment. Having taken the control
over
the majority of industries and markets
over
the worlds, this country inundates the American and European markets with not high-qualities products
from plastic toys and
electro
mobiles to full-pesticides food.

Furthermore
, throughout the last decades by virtue of advances in scientific fields the quality of earnings has
changed
and
so
has the type of lifestyle
rushing, depression, devastation have already become an inseparable, integral part of lucrative workplace.
Undoubtedly
, the present of excess money might
be estimated
to be a base for overconsumption,
however
without these
negative
features of living in a
big
city, they would have by far less considerable impact.
As well
, according the latest exploration of international scientists, there are certain genes that provoke
people
whom
own
them to do impulsive
purchases
from alcohol to new dress on a well-known web-market.

Coming to the subject of the Internet and all benefits that are in our
lives
owing to it, there a solid need to point up the significant
changes
which have taken place
over
the last decades
ability to
buy
products,
goods
not
only
a
next
-to-door shop,
but
as well
in a huge mall or even more in China
directly
from a producer. The accessibility and freedom in actions have made their deal
now
impulsive
purchases
can
be made
over
day and night without any restrictions. The formula that contains excess finance, accessibility to markets and products, our genes and desire to
get
rid of daily lassitude provides an explanation for overconsumption. Presumably while breakouts in
different
scientific spheres are a prominent player in these alterations,
so
are our attitude to this, enduring dispositions and indolence to looking for decisions.

In conclusion
, having analyzed all highlighted above aspects and
given
examples, it can be
easily
estimated that the world doesn’t stay at one spot and
changes
are ineluctable. While
undeniably
they do play prominent roles in our
lives
,
so
do our attitude to them. There is no need to retreat to the Luddite attitude to them,
rather
than to embrace a
positive
posture to innovations.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter overconsumption in the modern world due to noticeable breakthroughs in machine learning, chemical and medical industries etc. v. 2

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