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You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v.6

You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 6
Dear John, I an writing with context to my stay at your hotel ' Lilo' last weekend. When I came back, I recalled I left my bag in the hotel room. I stayed in room number 102, 5th floor, on the 1st and 2nd of September 2018. The bag which I left is a medium-sized one, brown in color with two side pockets and a big zip on the front. It contains some items such as my family pictures, few of my accessories and most importantly my cupboard keys. I would be really obliged if you could send it to my residential address through courier. You can furnish all my details from the reception computer software as entry was done when I checked in your respective hotel. Moreover, let me know if any further information is required from my end. Looking forward to receive my bag at the earliest. Thanking you in advance. Yours faithfully, Nick
Dear John,

Did you mean "If" or is a comma missing ("I,")?
I
Did you mean "am" (first person of 'to be') or "can"?
an
writing with context to my stay at your hotel '
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Lilo&
#039; last weekend. When I came back, I recalled I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
my bag in the hotel room.

I stayed in room number 102, 5th floor, on the 1st and 2nd of September 2018. The bag which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
is a medium-sized one,
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
brown in color
with two side pockets and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
zip on the front. It contains
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
items such as my family pictures, few of my accessories and most
importantly
my cupboard keys.

I would be
really
obliged if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it to my residential address through courier. You can furnish all my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
from the reception computer software as entry
was done
when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
in your respective hotel.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if any
further
information
is required
from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
.

Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to receiving".
to receive
my bag at the earliest. Thanking you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Nick
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 6

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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