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You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v.6

You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 6

Dear John, I an writing with context to my stay at your hotel ' Lilo' last weekend. When I came back, I recalled I left my bag in the hotel room. I stayed in room number 102, 5th floor, on the 1st and 2nd of September 2018. The bag which I left is a medium-sized one, brown in color with two side pockets and a big zip on the front. It contains some items such as my family pictures, few of my accessories and most importantly my cupboard keys. I would be really obliged if you could send it to my residential address through courier. You can furnish all my details from the reception computer software as entry was done when I checked in your respective hotel. Moreover, let me know if any further information is required from my end. Looking forward to receive my bag at the earliest. Thanking you in advance. Yours faithfully, Nick

Dear John,

Did you mean "If" or is a comma missing ("I,")?IfI,
I
Did you mean "am" (first person of 'to be') or "can"?amcan
an
 writing with context to my stay at your hotel &#039; Possible spelling mistake found.LiloLilos
Lilo&
#039; last weekend. When I came back, I recalled I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 my bag in the hotel room.

I stayed in room number 102, 5th floor, on the 1st and 2nd of September 2018. The bag which I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 is a medium-sized one, A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.brown
brown in color
 with two side pockets and a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 zip on the front. It contains This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 items such as my family pictures, few of my accessories and most importantly
 my cupboard keys.

I would be really
 obliged if you could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 it to my residential address through courier. You can furnish all my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 from the reception computer software as entry was done
 when I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
 in your respective hotel. Moreover
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know if any further
 information is required
 from my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
.

Looking forward In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to receiving".to receiving
to receive
 my bag at the earliest. Thanking you in advance.

Yours faithfully
,

Nick

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. v. 6

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

155 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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