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Too much traffic in britain as compared to 1980sPublic transport should be introduced and laws on ownership of private cars should be created. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

Too much traffic in britain as compared to 1980sPublic transport should be introduced and laws on ownership of private cars should be created. v. 2
A significant increase in the number of vehicles has been noticed in the past decade. Cars are no more a luxury and have rather become a basic need. This rapid increase in the number in the number of cars has badly influenced the environment we live in. Vehicles not only harm the nature but pose adverse effects on our health as well. Now, its high time that public transport should be encouraged and strict laws regarding ownership of cars should be introduced. With a rise in the number of vehicles the health of our planet has declined significantly. Vehicular emissions are the main cause of air pollution not only in India but all over the world. The government should encourage cleaner fuels like CNG which cause less harm to the nature and are eco-friendly as well. Moreover, governments should also monitor the ration of cars on road. For instance, the government of Singapore issues vehicles on lottery basis, keeping the traffic proportionate to the ecological status of the nature. The public transport is so efficient that people choose travelling through it only. Such initiatives help the government to control both traffic and environment related hazards. Vehicles not only are hazardous for the nature but, pose a great threat to human health as well. Nowadays people use their cars to go to short distances, which makes them physically unactive. Many young children take up cars, which is both illegal and makes them unfit too. Moreover, the habit of walking and cycling among youngsters has also seen a significant decline. According to the survey conducted by Indian Institute of Technology(Delhi) the introduction of power driven scooty has led to 30% decline in the sales of cycles. This proves that cycling is being curbed by vehicles. Hence, the status symbol attached with possession of vehicles should be removed and government should encourage the use of public transport among the people. This will help in restoring the ecological balance and make people more fit as well.
A significant increase in the
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number
of
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vehicles
has
been noticed
in the past decade.
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Cars
are no more a luxury and have
rather
become a basic need. This rapid increase in the
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number
in the
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number
of
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cars
has
badly
influenced the environment we
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live
in.
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Vehicles
not
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only
harm the
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nature
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but
pose adverse effects on our health as
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well
.
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Now
, its high time that public transport should
be encouraged
and strict laws regarding ownership of
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cars
should
be introduced
.

With a rise in the
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number
of
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vehicles
the health of our planet has declined
significantly
. Vehicular emissions are the main cause of air pollution not
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only
in India
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but
all over the world. The
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government
should encourage cleaner fuels like CNG which cause less harm to the
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nature
and are eco-friendly as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
.
Moreover
,
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governments
should
also
monitor the ration of
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cars
on road.
For instance
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
of Singapore issues
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
on lottery basis, keeping the traffic proportionate to the ecological status of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
. The public transport is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
efficient that
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people
choose travelling through it
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only
. Such initiatives
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help
the
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government
to control both traffic and environment related hazards.

Vehicles not
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only
are hazardous for the
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nature
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but
, pose a great threat to human health as
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well
. Nowadays
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people
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use
their
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cars
to go to short distances, which
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makes
them
physically
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unactive
.
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Many
young children take up
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cars
, which is both illegal and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them unfit too.
Moreover
, the habit of walking and cycling among youngsters has
also
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seen
a significant decline. According to the survey conducted by Indian Institute of Technology(Delhi) the introduction of power driven
Possible spelling mistake found.
scooty
has led to 30% decline in the sales of cycles. This proves that cycling is
being curbed
by vehicles.

Hence
, the status symbol attached with possession of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
should
be removed
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should encourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transport among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in restoring the ecological balance and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more fit as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Too much traffic in britain as compared to 1980sPublic transport should be introduced and laws on ownership of private cars should be created. v. 2

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