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Next month you are coming to Britain to study at a university in Scotland. On the way, you have a two day 'stop-over' in London. You need accommodation for one night and you would like to use this time to see as much as possible of Londo v.2

Next month you are coming to Britain to study at a university in Scotland. On the way, you have a two day 'stop-over' in London. You need accommodation for one night and you would like to use this time to see as much as possible of Londo v. 2
Dear Sir, With all due respect, I would like to begin by informing you that I am coming to London between 14th and 16th February on a transit to Glasgow, Scotland. I will attend a summer course in Glasgow College for the next couple of weeks. Hence, since I will be spending a couple of days in London, I am requesting some necessary information from you. For decades, the London Transport Information Center has provided the best information for students and tourists alike and I hope you will be able to do the same for me. I will stay at a budget hotel probably near a railway station. Please let me know if there is anything between £50 to £100 for the night for a room. I need my own bathroom but also I cannot afford to pay too much for the food and accommodation since I am a student. In addition to that, if the location of the inn is within the city center, I would be able to visit the famous historical as well as the heritage sites of the city. Please let me know the best possible area and lodge that I can stay at. Therefore, with the reasons stated above, I hope that you will provide me the best selection of hotel and also a list of places to visit. On another note, please let me know if there are any student discounts at this time of the year. I am really hoping to hear from you soon. With Regards.
Dear Sir,

With all due respect, I would like to
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begin
by informing you that I am coming to London between 14th and 16th February on a transit to Glasgow, Scotland. I will attend a summer course in Glasgow College for the
next
couple of weeks.
Hence
, since I will be spending a couple of days in London, I am requesting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
necessary information from you.

For decades, the London Transport Information Center has provided the best information for students and tourists alike and I hope you will be able to do the same for me. I will stay at a budget hotel
probably
near a railway station.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if there is anything between £50 to £100 for the night for a room. I need my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
bathroom
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but
also
I cannot afford to pay too much for the food and accommodation since I am a student.
In addition
to that, if the location of the inn is within the city center, I would be able to visit the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
historical
as well
as the heritage sites of the city.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know the best possible area and lodge that I can stay at.

Therefore
, with the reasons stated above, I hope that you will provide me the best selection of hotel and
also
a list of places to visit. On another note,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if there are any student discounts at this time of the year. I am
really
hoping to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

With Regards.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter Next month you are coming to Britain to study at a university in Scotland. On the way, you have a two day 'stop-over' in London. You need accommodation for one night and you would like to use this time to see as much as possible of Londo v. 2

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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