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thevline graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian from 1975 to 2000. v.2

thevline graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian from 1975 to 2000. v. 2
The given line graph compares the fast food consumption of Australian teenagers between 1975 to 2000. The most striking feature to be observed is that hamburgers and pizzas was gaining prevalence among youngster. It can be vividly seen that from 1975 to 1995, the use of pizza upsurged from 1 to 80 times a year. Between 1995 to 2000, the trend of eating pizza stayed constant at 85 times a year. Further, from 1975 to 1985, the figure of fish and chips followed a decreasing trend falling from 100 to 80 times a year. The use of fish and chips was 65 times a year but it curtailed to 39 times a year in 2000. Turning to rest of description, between 1975 to 1985, the figure of hamburgers made a remarkable improvement, rising from 10 to 85 tines a year. after that it upsurge slowly. As far as comparison is concerned, In the starting years young people prefer more fish and chips but it declined sharply compare to pizza and hamburgers. in 1990, the consumption of pizza' s overtook the consumption of fish and chips.
The
given
line graph compares the
fast
food consumption of Australian
teenagers
between 1975 to 2000
.

The most striking feature to
be observed
is that hamburgers and pizzas was gaining prevalence among youngster.

It can be
vividly
seen
that from 1975 to 1995, the
use
of pizza upsurged from 1 to 80
times
a
year
.
Between 1995 to 2000
, the trend of eating pizza stayed constant at 85
times
a
year
.
Further
, from 1975 to 1985, the figure of fish and chips followed a decreasing trend falling from 100 to 80
times
a
year
. The
use
of fish and chips was 65
times
a
year
but
it curtailed to 39
times
a
year
in 2000.

Turning to rest of description,
between 1975 to 1985
, the figure of hamburgers made a remarkable improvement, rising from 10 to 85 tines a
year
.
after
that it upsurge
slowly
. As far as comparison
is concerned
, In the starting years young
people
prefer more fish and chips
but
it declined
sharply
compare to pizza and hamburgers.
in
1990, the consumption of
pizza&
#039; s overtook the consumption of fish and chips.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter thevline graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian from 1975 to 2000. v. 2

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
185 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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