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the charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurant and sitdown restaurant. v.10

the charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurant and sitdown restaurant. v. 10
The pie charts illustrate the propotion of nutrition budget was spent on restaurant meals or home cooking by the average family through each from 1970 to 2000. Besides, the line graph desmontrates information about the figure of meals eaten in fast food and sit-down restaurant at the same period. It can be seen from the first chart, generally there was a upward trend of restaurant meals althought the average family spent lot of time cooking at home. In 1970, the percentage of the expenditure for food on restaurant meals reached the lowest at 10 percent. Throughout each year, there was an increase gradually, about 15% and 35% in 1980 and 1990 respectively. After 30 years, the proportion of food budget spent on restaurant meals rose 2 times compare to the percent in 1970, at 50%. From the line graph, it is very obvious to see that there were an increasing tendency of fast food and sitdown restaurant. Started in 1970, just around 20 meals both fast food and sitdown restaurant. While the number of meals of sitdown restaurant has increased steadily throughout 30 years, merely 30 meals, over 45 meals and around 50 meals in 1980, 1990 and 2000 respectively. By contrast, the figure of fast food meals has rosen dramatically. Between 1980 and 1990, the number of meals was about 30 meals to solely 55 meals. Reaching a peak at 90 fast food meals in the 21th century.
The pie charts illustrate the
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propotion
of nutrition budget
was spent
on
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restaurant
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meals
or home cooking by the average family through each from 1970 to 2000.
Besides
, the line graph
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desmontrates
information about the figure of
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meals
eaten in
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fast
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food
and
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sit-down
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restaurant
at the same period.

It can be
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seen
from the
first
chart,
generally
there was
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a
upward trend of
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restaurant
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meals
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althought
the average family spent
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lot of
time cooking at home. In 1970, the percentage of the expenditure for
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food
on
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restaurant
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meals
reached the lowest at 10 percent. Throughout each year, there was an increase
gradually
, about 15% and 35% in 1980 and 1990
respectively
. After 30 years, the proportion of
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food
budget spent on
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restaurant
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meals
rose 2 times compare to the percent in 1970, at 50%.

From the line graph, it is
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very
obvious to
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see
that there were an increasing tendency of
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fast
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food
and
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sitdown
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restaurant
.
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Started
in 1970,
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just
around 20
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meals
both
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fast
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food
and
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sitdown
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restaurant
. While the number of
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meals
of
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sitdown
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restaurant
has increased
steadily
throughout 30 years,
merely
30
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meals
, over 45
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meals
and around 50
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meals
in 1980, 1990 and 2000
respectively
. By contrast, the figure of
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fast
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food
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meals
has
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rosen
dramatically
. Between 1980 and 1990, the number of
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meals
was about 30
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meals
to
solely
55
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meals
. Reaching a peak at 90
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fast
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food
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meals
in the
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21th
century.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter the charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurant and sitdown restaurant. v. 10

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5.5
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