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Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: •explain why you are writing•express concern about the missing card•ask them what they intend to doYou do NOT need to write your own address v.3

Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: •explain why you are writing•express concern about the missing card•ask them what they intend to doYou do NOT need to write your own address v. 3
Dear sir, Writing this letter to inform you about card number 11253489 was not contain in that envelope, which I received from postman as on 30/12/2019, but the letter was attached with that. A parcel on 30/12/2019 had been delivered by delivery boy. That is received by my mate. When I came back from the office she handed over me that envelop without consisting card and the envelop was also torn from the bottom. As I opt the Short message service of the bank and pay it for monthly direct from the account. I applied for credit card 15 days ago. On 20/12/2019 I received an official message from bank that above said card number has issued under my name and will be received by end of the month with consisted a letter of card personal identification number. Now, I want to know what are the consequences which will be faced by me due to the loss of card. Is there any possibility that someone can misuse that card and the liability of that card will belong to me. Kindly block that card, so that I can escape from any financial loss. Hope you will accept my request and do this needful Yours sincerely Sham
Dear sir,

Writing this letter to inform you about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
number 11253489 was not
Consider using a past participle here: "contained".
contain
in that envelope, which I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
received
from postman as on 30/12/2019,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the letter
was attached
with that. A parcel on 30/12/2019 had
been delivered
by delivery boy.
That is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
received
by my mate. When I came back from the office she handed over me that envelop without consisting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
and the
Did you mean the noun "envelope"?
envelop
was
also
torn from the bottom.

As I opt the Short message service of the bank and pay it for monthly direct from the account. I applied for credit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
15 days ago. On 20/12/2019 I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
received
an official message from bank that above said
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
number has issued under my name and will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
received
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the month with consisted a letter of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
personal identification number.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I want to know what are the consequences which will
be faced
by me due to the loss of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
. Is there any possibility that someone can misuse that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
and the liability of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
will belong to me. Kindly block that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can escape from any financial loss.

Hope you will accept my request and do this needful

Yours
sincerely


Sham
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: •explain why you are writing•express concern about the missing card•ask them what they intend to doYou do NOT need to write your own address v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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