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there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved write a letter to your manager in your letter describe the complaints that have v.2

there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved write a letter to your manager in your letter describe the complaints that have v. 2
Dear Mr. Sharma, Last week, you have ordered me to provided suggestions for making changes to our office' s front desk area and i am writing in response to this order A number of complaints have been made by our clients who have come to our office to visit us. they say that there is no proper reply to them from our front desk officer. Also, the clients feel that there are less number of chairs available in the reception. The telephone in the reception desk is under repair and due to the presence of our receptionist once in a blue moon, clients find it difficult to make enquiries. Though many of our clients went back furiously, a few have left feedback in the register placed on our reception desk. The reception area is essential because, that is the place where clients get answer for their queries and clients have to be directed to the concerned officers only in the reception. Since, reception is the frontmost place in the office, a client' s impression about our office is developed in his mind as a result of how he is treated by our receptionist. In order to develop our reception, the first step ought to be taken is to change the receptionist. If our clients are given proper details through phone regarding the documents that must be brought to our office, it will be easy for them to approach us. Henceforth, the telephone should be repaired first. It is even more good to change the telephone to an intercom which connects to all other staffs in the office. Finally, there must be an increment in the number of chairs in the front desk area. I hope the above mentioned suggestions will be taken into consideration. Yours sincerely, Gayathri Das.
Dear Mr. Sharma,

Last week, you have ordered me to provided suggestions for making
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changes
to our
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office&
#039; s front
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desk
area and
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i
am writing in response to this order

A number of complaints have
been made
by our
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clients
who have
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come
to our
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office
to visit us. they say that there is no proper reply to them from our front
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
desk
officer.
Also
, the
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clients
feel that there are less number of chairs available in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
. The telephone in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
desk
is under repair and due to the presence of our receptionist once in a blue moon,
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clients
find it difficult to
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make
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enquiries
. Though
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many
of our
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clients
went back
furiously
, a few have
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left
feedback in the register placed on our
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reception
desk.

The
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reception
area is essential
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because
,
that is
the place where
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clients
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get
answer for their queries and
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clients
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have to
be directed
to the concerned officers
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only
in the
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reception
. Since,
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reception
is the
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frontmost
place in the
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office
, a
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client&
#039; s impression about our
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office
is developed
in his mind
as a result
of how he
is treated
by our receptionist.

In order to develop our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
, the
first
step ought to
be taken
is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the receptionist. If our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clients
are
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given
proper
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details
through phone regarding the documents that
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must
be brought
to our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
, it will be easy for them to approach us. Henceforth, the telephone should
be repaired
first
. It is even more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the telephone to an intercom which connects to all other staffs in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
office
.
Finally
, there
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must
be an increment in the number of chairs in the front
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
desk
area.

I hope the above mentioned suggestions will
be taken
into consideration.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Gayathri
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Das
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved write a letter to your manager in your letter describe the complaints that have v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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