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There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v.2

There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to report the problems we have been experiencing with your public transportation services in Victoria Island, for the past one month. The major issue is that the current number of buses plying our routes are not enough. The vehicles were reduced from fifty to twenty, causing so many people to have to wait for the motors to do a number of trips before they can join one. As a result, many people arrive at their destinations, later than planned. Also, some of the vehicles, because of poor maintenance, break down before they could complete their first trip, leaving many people stranded. As a result of lateness to work, many people have been served warning letters and a few others relieved of their duties. Also, traders from neighboring cities have shunned our markets because of the disappointments they have experienced with our transport system, and the consequence is a hike in the price of goods and services. In view of these challenges, I would suggest that you replace the motors with at least, thirty new ones. Also, I will advise that your company retrains your current set of mechanics and hire new competent hands to compliment the old ones. I believe that if these suggestions are implemented, it will help arrest these problems. Yours faithfully, Okoronkwo Alfred Chinedu.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to report the problems we have been experiencing with your public transportation services in Victoria Island, for the past one month.

The major issue is that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
number of buses plying our routes are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
. The vehicles were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
from fifty to twenty, causing
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so
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
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have to
wait for the motors to do a number of trips
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before
they can
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join
one.
As a result
,
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
arrive at their destinations, later than planned.
Also
,
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
vehicles,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of poor maintenance, break down
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
they could complete their
first
trip, leaving
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
stranded.

As a result
of lateness to work,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have
been served
warning letters and a few others relieved of their duties.
Also
, traders from neighboring cities have shunned our markets
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the disappointments they have experienced with our transport system, and the consequence is a hike in the price of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and services.

In view of these challenges, I would suggest that you replace the motors with at least, thirty new ones.
Also
, I will advise that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
retrains your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
set of mechanics and hire new competent hands to compliment the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
ones.

I believe that if these suggestions
are implemented
, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
arrest these problems.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Okoronkwo
Alfred
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Chinedu
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6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently Write a letter to the management of the public transport company In your letter describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting the public suggest some changes t v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
224 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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