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07. 10. 2017There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently. Write a letter to the management of the public transport company. In your letter-describe the problems-explain how these problems are affecting the public-suggest som v.2

07. 10. 2017There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently. Write a letter to the management of the public transport company. In your letter-describe the problems-explain how these problems are affecting the public-suggest som v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to complain about the poor service provided by your transport company. I live in a South-West block of Springfield. Since a new mayor had been elected two months ago, the work of public transport has become questionable. Firstly, the number of buses that operate in my area has decreased from fifty to twenty; thus, bus stops are always full of commuters. In addition, a novel schedule has been introduced that shits time of the departure of the first passenger vehicle from 6: 30 to 7: 30. Although those changes may appear to be insignificant they have a devastating impact on the well-being of local dwellers. Primarily, bus stops are always overcrowded and people have to queue for hours to get to their destination. Moreover, the buses are always out of schedule and it has become not reliable as well. Thus, it is difficult to use it. Finally, the new schedule turned lives of many into a nightmare because the majority of those who live in my block works in a Steel Plant and their working day starts at 7: 30; They used to travel of the first bus but nowadays it has become impossible because when it arrived at our district it is already too late. Those problems and their consequences may be addressed through several actions. Increasing number of buses or using vehicles that can get on board more commuters or introducing alternative means of transportation will make work of public transportation more convenient. Furthermore, returning to the old schedule will surely alleviate lives of Steel Plant' s employees who live in my district. And punishing bus drivers for violating a schedule will make buses reliable again. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to complain about the poor service provided by your transport
company
.

I
live
in a South-West block of Springfield. Since a new mayor had
been elected
two months ago, the work of public transport has become questionable.
Firstly
, the number of buses that operate in my area has decreased from fifty to twenty;
thus
, bus
stops
are always full of commuters.
In addition
, a novel
schedule
has
been introduced
that
shits
time of the departure of the
first
passenger vehicle from 6: 30 to 7: 30.

Although
those
changes
may appear to be insignificant they have a devastating impact on the well-being of local dwellers.
Primarily
, bus
stops
are always overcrowded and
people
have to
queue for hours to
get
to their destination.
Moreover
, the buses are always out of
schedule
and it has become not reliable
as well
.
Thus
, it is difficult to
use
it.
Finally
, the new
schedule
turned
lives
of
many
into a nightmare
because
the majority of those who
live
in my block works in a Steel Plant and their working day
starts
at 7: 30; They
used
to travel of the
first
bus
but
nowadays it has become impossible
because
when it arrived at our district it is already too late.

Those problems and their consequences may
be addressed
through several actions. Increasing number of buses or using vehicles that can
get
on board more commuters or introducing alternative means of transportation will
make
work of public transportation more convenient.
Furthermore
, returning to the
old
schedule
will
surely
alleviate
lives
of Steel
Plant&
#039; s employees who
live
in my district. And punishing bus drivers for violating a
schedule
will
make
buses reliable again.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter 07. 10. 2017There have been some problems with public transportation in your area recently. Write a letter to the management of the public transport company. In your letter-describe the problems-explain how these problems are affecting the public-suggest som v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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