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There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. v.2

There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. v. 2
Dear Mr Michael, I am writing with regard to the complaints we have received about our reception area over the past few weeks from our visitors. I have personally looked at the complaint logs and would like to share my suggestions to address the problem. People who had to deal with our reception area mostly expressed their dissatisfaction about the congestion and delay in getting service. They also vehemently complained about the lack of proper sitting arrangements. Finally, many of them were dissatisfied as we do not have a desk and arrangement for filling in forms in the reception room. Needless to say, the reception area and the service provided there represent our company's image. This is the first place where a potential client visits and if we fail to give a good impression, we would surely fail to increase our client base. As a solution, I would suggest that we need to extend our reception area and hire a second receptionist. Perhaps, we can annex the adjacent room to the existing reception area and provide a desk with papers, pens and other amenities so that visitors can easily fill up the forms. Thank you for giving the matter a top priority and I hope you would consider my suggestions to keep our visitors' complaints to the minimum level. Yours sincerely, Christie Barlow
Dear Mr Michael,

I am writing with regard to the complaints we have received about our
reception
area
over the past few weeks from our visitors. I have
personally
looked at the complaint logs and would like to share my suggestions to address the problem.

People
who had to deal with our
reception
area
mostly
expressed their dissatisfaction about the congestion and delay in getting service. They
also
vehemently
complained about the lack of proper sitting arrangements.
Finally
,
many
of them
were dissatisfied
as we do not have a desk and arrangement for filling in forms in the
reception
room.

Needless to say, the
reception
area
and the service provided there represent our
company
's image. This is the
first
place where a potential client visits and if we fail to give a
good
impression, we would
surely
fail to increase our client base.

As a solution, I would suggest that we need to extend our
reception
area
and hire a second receptionist. Perhaps, we can annex the adjacent room to the existing
reception
area
and provide a desk with papers, pens and other amenities
so
that visitors can
easily
fill up the forms.

Thank you for giving the matter a top priority and I hope you would consider my suggestions to
keep
our visitors' complaints to the minimum level.

Yours
sincerely
,

Christie Barlow
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
222 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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