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there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. write a letter to your managerin your letter: describe the complaints that hav v.2

there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. write a letter to your managerin your letter: describe the complaints that hav v. 2
Dear Mr. Ahmadi, I am writing to you about the suggestions you asked me about the reception area. As you know, there have been many complaints about that place. First, the load of patients at the clinic is much every afternoon due to Dr. Younesian, which leads to crowdedness in the reception area. Not only does this badger patients by the delay in their service, but it forces us to treat less patients. Second, the reception area is in the middle of the dental work place, thus when it becomes crowded, it will be impossible to get around to go to the radiography’s room. The reception area is the first place patients will face, so any disorder in such place is very bad for the clinic’s reputation. Also, this place is like the management unit for the dental area, thus any thing happens there affects all the place. First, I suggest you establish another reception area to take care of Dr. Younesian’s patients. Second, you should consider moving the reception area out of the dental area to the main hall like what we suggested you in the first meeting. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Aidin Farughi
Dear Mr. Ahmadi,

I am writing to you about the suggestions you asked me about the
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reception
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area
. As you know, there have been
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many
complaints about that place.

First
, the load of
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patients
at the clinic is much every afternoon due to Dr.
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Younesian
, which leads to
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crowdedness
in the
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reception
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area
. Not
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only
does this badger
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patients
by the delay in their service,
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but
it forces us to treat
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less
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patients
. Second, the
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reception
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area
is in the middle of the dental work
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place
,
thus
when it becomes crowded, it will be impossible to
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get
around to go to the radiography’s room.

The
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reception
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area
is the
first
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place
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patients
will face,
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so
any disorder in such
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place
is
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very
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bad
for the clinic’s reputation.
Also
, this
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place
is like the management unit for the dental
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area
,
thus
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any thing
happens there affects all the place.

First
, I suggest you establish another
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reception
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area
to take care of Dr.
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Younesian
’s
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patients
. Second, you should consider moving the
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reception
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area
out of the dental
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area
to the main hall like what we suggested you in the
first
meeting.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Aidin
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Farughi
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter there has been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. write a letter to your managerin your letter: describe the complaints that hav v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
199 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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