Dear Sir or Madam,
I would like to express my appreciation for your decision to spend money for the benefit of our community - either to sponsor a local juvenile sports team or to arrange two concerts.
Undeniably, your support for the local junior sports team for two years would ensure better training and equipment for the young and aspiring athletes which in turn would bring success and fame to our community. Your sponsorship for them would not only attract more sponsors in the future but also ensure that they become successful athletes in the future. Consequently, more children would be interested to be in sports.
On the other hand, if you sponsor two open-air concerts, it would excite people to enjoy the events. Besides, it would advertise your brand and set a milestone for others to arrange such engaging events. Many local bands would get an opportunity to perform and show their talent thus become known to many people.
Though both initiatives would be highly appreciated by the local people, I believe paying for the concert would be a far better idea especially at a time when people are having less frequent chances to gather and enjoy together.
I would like to thank you again for a great decision and your willingness to support the community.
Yours faithfully,
George Adamson
Dear Sir or Madam,
I would like to express my appreciation for your decision to spend money for the benefit of our community  
-
 either to sponsor a  
local
 juvenile sports team or to arrange two concerts. 
Undeniably
, your support for the  
local
 junior sports team for two years would ensure better training and equipment for the young and aspiring athletes which in turn would bring success and fame to our community. Your sponsorship for them would not  
only
 attract more sponsors in the future  
but
  also
 ensure that they become successful athletes in the future.  
Consequently
, more children would  
be interested
 to be in sports. 
On the other hand
, if you sponsor two open-air concerts, it would excite  
people
 to enjoy the  
events
.  
Besides
, it would advertise your brand and set a milestone for others to arrange such engaging  
events
.  
Many
  local
 bands would  
get
 an opportunity to perform and  
show
 their talent  
thus
 become known to  
many
  people
.
Though both initiatives would be  
highly
 appreciated by the  
local
  people
, I believe paying for the concert would be a far better  
idea
  especially
 at a time when  
people
 are having less frequent chances to gather and enjoy together.
I would like to thank you again for a great decision and your willingness to support the community.
Yours  
faithfully
,
George Adamson
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