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You and your friend are planning a picnic in the country side. Write: •Which arrangements you have already done? •Other activities that can be done•How can your friend help with the arrangements? v.2

You and your friend are planning a picnic in the country side. Write: •Which arrangements you have already done? •Other activities that can be done•How can your friend help with the arrangements? v. 2
Dear Manmohan, How are you doing? I’m very excited and looking forward to our next picnic in country side of the western Pune. As a part of planning, I’ve sorted out several things already, hope you don’t mind. First thing first, accommodation is off the list, It is a camping area on the bank of beautiful river called kabini, which should be a perfect place to enjoy natural heritage that this site has to offer. For food, the nearest hotel is 10 km far, so either we have to carry ingredients with us and have barbeque on the camp or we can drive back to hotel for meals. I’m fine either way so it’s up to you really. There are several water sports available at the location, such as river rafting, which are at quite affordable price and I’m very keen to try it. In addition, a gigantic mountain is located at the bank of the river. Would you be interested in night track? There is not much left to do, except for enquiry at spots center. Would my mind calling at the center and check if we need to bring our own equipment or they supply it? My car is broke down yesterday; can we take your car on the trip? I hope it’s not too much to ask. See you soon. Best wishes, Sandip
Dear
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Manmohan
,

How are you doing? I’m
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very
excited and looking forward to our
next
picnic in country side of the western Pune.

As a part of planning, I’ve sorted out several things already, hope you don’t mind.
First
thing
first
, accommodation is off the list, It is a camping area on the bank of
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beautiful
river called
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kabini
, which should be a perfect place to enjoy natural heritage that this site
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has to
offer. For food, the nearest hotel is 10 km far,
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so
either we
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have to
carry ingredients with us and have
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barbeque
on the
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camp or
we can drive back to hotel for meals. I’m fine either way
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so
it’s up to you
really
.

There are several water sports available at the location, such as river rafting, which are at quite affordable price and I’m
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
keen to try it.
In addition
, a gigantic mountain
is located
at the bank of the river. Would you
be interested
in night
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track
?

There is not much
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left
to do,
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except for
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enquiry
at spots center. Would my mind calling at the center and
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check
if we need to bring our
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own
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
equipment or
they supply it? My car is broke down yesterday; can we take your car on the trip? I hope it’s not too much to ask.

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See
you
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soon
.

Best wishes,

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Sandip
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You and your friend are planning a picnic in the country side. Write: •Which arrangements you have already done? •Other activities that can be done•How can your friend help with the arrangements? v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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