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The use of cell phones while driving should be strictly forbidden. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The use of cell phones while driving should be strictly forbidden. v. 1
The debate over the driver' s usage of mobile phones has not been put to rest. Some people believe that these devices should be forbidden during the motion time. But is this that worthwhile? For me, I firmly agree that that government should impose a strong limitation in this particular case. To begin with, the major reason for such people' s rights restriction is that driving is dangerous under such conditions. This is because drivers often lose concentration when doing both activities simultaneously. In my experience, once in 2010, I was talking by mobile phone and nearly have bumped another car. Had I not used this device, I would never have got in such an awful situation. Moreover, it is generally agreed that electromagnetic emission from any kind of redundant instruments could have an adverse impact on the car' s systems. This is due to the fact that modern automobiles are full of electronics which are already installed and work primarily by using wireless technology with similar frequency. A good instance here is a well-known sound from the cars radio speakers which you can hear when speaking by phone there. Another reason why limitation should be applied is that driving under such conditions slowers the transport system pace in the city. This cause many traffic problems ranging from small jams at the crossroads in the mornings to gargantuan ones right before some holidays like Christmas or New Year near the shopping mall. In addition, it appears that it is harder to get to the destination on time due to this kind of driving. Personally, I have stopped using my own car in Moscow since 2012, because public transport, especially the underground is more convenient when you do not want to be late. Having said that, not only are there many dangerous factors for using cell phones by drivers but also there are many advantages of its prohibition, so the government should implement a strict law with such regulations. Not only this would improve the safety on the roads but also this would better the transport situation in cities.
The debate over the
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phones
has not
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people
believe that these devices should
be forbidden
during the motion time.
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is this that worthwhile? For me, I
firmly
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agree
that that
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government
should impose a strong limitation in this particular case.

To
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begin
with, the major reason for such
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people&
#039; s rights restriction is that driving is
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dangerous
under such conditions. This is
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because
drivers
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often
lose concentration when doing both activities
simultaneously
. In my experience, once in 2010, I was talking by mobile
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phone
and
nearly
have bumped another
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car
. Had I not
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used
this device, I would never have
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got
in such an awful situation.
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, it is
generally
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agreed
that electromagnetic emission from any kind of redundant instruments could have an adverse impact on the
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car&
#039; s systems.
This is due to the fact that
modern automobiles are full of electronics which are already installed and work
primarily
by using wireless technology with similar frequency. A
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good
instance here is a well-known sound from the
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cars
radio speakers which you can hear when speaking by
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phone
there.

Another reason why limitation should
be applied
is that driving under such conditions
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slowers
the transport system pace in the city. This cause
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many
traffic problems ranging from
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small
jams at the crossroads in the mornings to gargantuan ones right
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before
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some
holidays like Christmas or New Year near the shopping mall.
In addition
, it appears that it is harder to
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get
to the destination on time due to this kind of driving.
Personally
, I have
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stopped
using my
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own
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car
in Moscow since 2012,
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because
public transport,
especially
the underground is more convenient when you do not want to be late.

Having said that, not
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only
are there
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many
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dangerous
factors for using cell
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phones
by drivers
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but
also
there are
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many
advantages of its prohibition,
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so
the
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government
should implement a strict law with such regulations. Not
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only
this would
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improve
the safety on the roads
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but
also
this would better the transport situation in cities.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter The use of cell phones while driving should be strictly forbidden. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
348 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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