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Question: You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain the important-Apologize for the situation-Suggest a new arrangement v.1

Question: You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain the important-Apologize for the situation-Suggest a new arrangement v. 1
Dear Rajan, It was pleasure to receive letter from you as always and you mentioned the date wise plan for my trip to London. I am very excited about London visit but it seems like that I would not be able to travel to United Kingdom on scheduled dates. As you know that my sister’s wedding was scheduled on 11th July’18 but is being preponed because she and her partner have been offered handsome opportunity with significant financial gains. Therefore, both decided to marry on 15th May’18. Sarah is my only sister and I do not want to disappoint in any case. Even my parents have already started the shopping and booking for venue. They have especially given me the decoration responsibilities and of course I will be best man for my sister during wedding. First of all, I want to apologize for changing the plans which we made so long back. I do not have any words to express my situation so I decided to not to cancel the visit but just postpone it by two weeks. I can plan to come on 31st May instead of 15th May. I have already spoken to airlines and they comprehended my situation and agree to change the dates. I would like to know if you are convenient on changed dates. Let me know your opinion. Looking forward to your reply Best Regards, Jack
Dear
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Rajan
,

It was pleasure to receive letter from you as always and you mentioned the date wise plan for my trip to London. I am
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very
excited about London visit
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but
it seems like that I would not be able to travel
A determiner is probably missing here: "to the United Kingdom".
to United Kingdom
on scheduled dates.

As you know that my sister’s wedding
was scheduled
on 11th July’18
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but
is being
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preponed
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because
she and her partner have
been offered
handsome opportunity with significant financial gains.
Therefore
, both decided to marry on 15th May’18. Sarah is my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
sister and I do not want to disappoint in any case. Even my parents have already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
the shopping and booking for venue. They have
especially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me the decoration responsibilities and
of course
I will be best
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man
for my sister during wedding.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I want to apologize for changing the plans which we made
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so
long back. I do not have any words to express my situation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I decided
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to not to
cancel the visit
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but
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just
postpone it by two weeks. I can plan to
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come
on 31st May
instead
of 15th May.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have already spoken to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
airlines and
they comprehended my situation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to
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change
the dates.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to know if you are convenient on
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changed
dates.
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Let
me know your opinion. Looking forward to your
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reply


Best Regards,

Jack
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS letter Question: You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Explain the important-Apologize for the situation-Suggest a new arrangement v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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