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You need a new accommodation for your family. Write a letter to the who you rent your flat from and explain: - Why your family need a new accommodation- When you want to move- How you would like your new accommodation v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, My wife and I are your tenants at the Eleganza Estate and I am writing to inform you that we need a new apartment. The house we live in currently is a one-bedroom flat. It was suitable for both of us, since we were alone and had no child. However, we are expecting our first baby in November and when he is born, my mother-in-law will join us to help take care of him and my spouse. Therefore, we believe that our current abode will be too small for all of us, hence the need for a new home. Our expectation is to pack into the new house in September, when our current rent expires. This will also allow us some time to get it ready for the people we are expecting. We would like our new home to be a three-bedroom bungalow with good water and electricity supply. It should also be close to my office in Victoria Island, to enable me shuttle freely between office and home, whenever necessary. Please let us know as soon as you see something within our description, so we can come for inspection. Yours faithfully, Okoronkwo Alfred.

IELTS letter You need a new accommodation for your family. Write a letter to the who you rent your flat from and explain: - Why your family need a new accommodation- When you want to move- How you would like your new accommodation v.2

Dear Sir or Madam,

My wife and I are your tenants at the
Eleganza
Estate and
I am writing to inform you that we need a
new
apartment.

The
house
we
live
in
currently
is a one-bedroom flat. It was suitable for both of us, since we were alone and had no child.
However
, we are expecting our
first
baby in November and when he
is born
, my mother-in-law will
join
us to
help
take care of him and my spouse.
Therefore
, we believe that our
current
abode will be too
small
for all of us,
hence
the need for a
new
home.

Our expectation is to pack into the
new
house
in September, when our
current
rent expires. This will
also
allow
us
some
time to
get
it ready for the
people
we are expecting.

We would like our
new
home to be a three-bedroom bungalow with
good
water and electricity supply. It should
also
be close to my office in Victoria Island, to enable me shuttle
freely
between office and home, whenever necessary.

Please
let
us know as
soon
as you
see
something within our description,
so
we can
come
for inspection.

Yours
faithfully
,

Okoronkwo
Alfred.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resources: 5.5
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