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A buider worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say, - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about job? - What do you expect him to do about is? v.1

A buider worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say, - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about job? - What do you expect him to do about is? v. 1
Dear Sir, I am Jay Thanki. My address is 38, G - Street, New Cramp Road. Before a couple of year I faced some issue with the platform of my kitchen. And to make it fix I called your office. They sent a person to my place to fix the problem. Here I would like to tell you the person came to my home and fix the problem but still I am nt satisfy with his work. Firstly he reach to my home very late as he give me time. After reached he asked me what is issue kind of issue I was facing. As I was actually surprised that I had already explain every thing on call then why he was asking me again. As I again explain him every thing and he started his work. During the work he got many phone calls and he was waesting lot of time on talking on phone call. At last I lost my control and told him to he must not recive call and first give concentrate on the work then he got exhust and damage my chemni of stove. That was very rediculase and shameful. After complating work he told me to pay 200$, I argued him that the person who booked my service told me that there was only 50$ charge for that work. Now, I am requesting you that please send a perosn to repair the chemni of stove without charging me any single cost and return my extra money which the person took from me. Yours sincerely, Jay Thanki
Dear Sir,

I am Jay
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Thanki
. My address is 38, G
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
Street, New Cramp Road.
“Before” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Before
Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: "a couple of years".
a couple of year
I faced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issue with the platform of my kitchen. And to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
I called your office. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
to my place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the problem.

Here I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
came to my home and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the problem
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
I am
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nt
satisfy with his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
Firstly
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "reaches", "reached".
reach
to my home
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
late as he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gives", "gave".
give
me time.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
reached he asked me what is issue kind of issue I was facing. As I was actually surprised that I had already
Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: "explained".
explain
every thing on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
call
then why he was asking me again. As I again
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
him every
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
thing and
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. During the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
phone
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
calls and
he was
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waesting
lot of time on talking on phone
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
call
. At
The comma is probably missing here: "last, I".
last I
lost my control and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him to he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
not
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recive
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call
and
first
give concentrate on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
then he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
Possible spelling mistake found.
exhust
and damage my
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chemni
of stove. That was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
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rediculase
and shameful. After
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complating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me to pay
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$200".
200$
, I argued him that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
who booked my service
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me that there was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$50".
50$
charge for that work.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I am requesting you that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a
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perosn
to repair the
Possible spelling mistake found.
chemni
of stove without charging me any single cost and return my extra money which the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
took from me.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jay
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Thanki
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter A buider worked in your house a few weeks ago. You did not like the result of his work. Write a letter to him and say, - Describe the work you wanted him to do. - What is your complaint about job? - What do you expect him to do about is? v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
261 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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