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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v.6

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v. 6
Studying abroad is becoming increasingly popular. Nowadays, the number of students are increasingly moving to foreign countries for their college and university studies. I believe it has more benefits than its drawbacks. This essay will discuss both sides of argument to support my opinion. It is agreed, that studying abroad has many disadvantages. Firstly, students have to be independent enough to solve their problems on their own. This can be extremely difficult for an individual who has never stayed away from his family and parents. Secondly, students often struggles to adjust different cultures and languages which can creat stress and results in poor performance. For example, when I first moved to UAE for my post-graduation studies, I found extremely difficult to get acquainted with Arabic students and often struggled to interact with them due to which my performance in 1st year was not up to the par. In other words, studying overseas can be very challenging and disadvantageous if the student is unable to overcome this situation. Despite this, studying overseas brings many benefits for a students. Firstly, the student who acquire degree from foreign universities has more skills to offer such as language and adaptability. Their job career is groomed in a multinational culture which gives them an edge when it comes to opportunities to work on higher position than those who obtained their degree from the local university. Moreover, studying overseas, improve an individual’s ability to view problems in a broader way because of their understanding of different cultures and languages, therefore they offer more practical and creative solutions. For instance, students moving from Asian countries to UK has more exposure of different cultures than those studying in the region. In other words, studying overseas offers numerous advantages such as language and adaptability skills. In conclusion, although studying overseas has some drawbacks such difficulty in adjusting culture and language differences they are outweighed by its benefits such as developing language and adaptability skills. It prepares students to develop themselves at an international level.
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moving to foreign countries for their college and university studies. I believe it has more benefits than its drawbacks. This essay will discuss both sides of argument to support my opinion.

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. This can be
extremely
difficult for an individual who has never stayed away from his family and parents.
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struggles to adjust
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struggled to interact with them due to which my performance in 1st year was not up to the par.
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overseas
can be
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challenging and disadvantageous if the
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student
is unable to overcome this situation.

Despite this,
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brings
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benefits for a
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.
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, the
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student
who acquire degree from foreign universities has more
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skills
to offer such as
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language
and adaptability. Their job career
is groomed
in a multinational
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culture
which gives them an edge when it
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comes
to opportunities to work on higher position than those who obtained their degree from the local university.
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,
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an individual’s ability to view problems in a broader way
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of their understanding of
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different
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,
therefore
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students
moving from Asian countries to UK has more exposure of
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different
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cultures
than those
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in the region.
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,
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studying
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overseas
offers numerous advantages such as
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language
and adaptability
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skills
.

In conclusion
, although
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has
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some
drawbacks such difficulty in adjusting
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culture
and
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language
differences they
are outweighed
by its benefits such as developing
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language
and adaptability
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skills
. It prepares
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students
to develop themselves at an international level.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS letter More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks? v. 6

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  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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