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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter*make suggestions as to how they could make friends*suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities*giv v.2

A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter*make suggestions as to how they could make friends*suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities*giv v. 2
Dearest Moni, I am missing you a lot. I can understand how tough it would be to get set with your new school environment. Though, your new classmates avoid you at first, mingle with them and get involved in class activities. Help and assist them in clarifying subject doubts. Also, find a travel friend who can accompany you from school to house. If you get such a friend from your class itself it will be too good. You can also study together. As you are good in writing English poems and essays, I would suggest you to join English club in your school. Participate in both inter and intra school competitions and prove your talent. You can easily get recognized in your new school. I would also say that in the urge of making friends, don’t fall into a bad company. You know it very well that getting a good name and holding on to it is very tough but getting a bad name is very easy. Do not trust anyone easily. Think twice before doing anything. If you feel something is not right then do not proceed for others words. Update often about your whereabouts to parents. We cannot blame anyone after something unexpected happened. So stay safe and cautious. We will meet when we have long weekends and during vacation. Take care. With love and regards, Kirthika.
Dearest
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Moni
,

I am missing you a lot. I can understand how tough it would be to
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get
set with your new
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school
environment.

Though, your new classmates avoid you at
first
, mingle with them and
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get
involved in
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class
activities.
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Help
and assist them in clarifying subject doubts.

Also
, find a travel friend who can accompany you from
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school
to
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house
.
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If
you
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get
such a friend from your
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class
itself it will be too
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good
. You can
also
study together.

As you are
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good in writing
English poems and essays, I would suggest you to
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join
English club in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. Participate in both inter and
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intra
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school
competitions and prove your talent. You can
easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
recognized in your new school.

I would
also
say that in the urge of making friends, don’t fall into a
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bad
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company
. You know it
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very
well that getting a
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good
name and holding on to it is
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very
tough
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but
getting a
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bad
name is
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very
easy. Do not trust anyone
easily
.
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Think
twice
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before
doing anything. If you feel something is not right then do not proceed for others words. Update
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often
about your whereabouts to parents. We cannot blame anyone after something unexpected happened.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
stay safe and cautious.

We will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
when we have long weekends and during vacation. Take care.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and regards,

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Kirthika
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter*make suggestions as to how they could make friends*suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities*giv v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
229 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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