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Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself. v.2

Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself. v. 2
Dear Mr. Kashif, I am an undergraduate student of final year studying B. S Civil Engineering from NED University, Karachi. I have selected Transportation Engineering (Part-II) as an optional course which is best subjected to my interest. I have always been keen to become a civil engineer whenever I thought I would go for my professional studies. I admire the aesthetics of the architectural ideas and want to fulfill the requirements needed to present it physically in front of our eyes. I also love to go for long journeys and travel in all modes of transportation and probably due to this hobby, I have developed my interest in Transportation Engineering. Studying this subject would guide me in all calculations related to geometric and pavement design. This would also help me in achieving good scores in my final year exams as my dissertation is also related to the same course. I hope I would be able to continue my passion along with studies and would not give you chance to complain for my decision. Regards Huma Mohiuddin
Dear Mr.
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Kashif
,

I am an undergraduate student of final year studying B. S Civil Engineering from NED University, Karachi. I have selected Transportation Engineering (Part-II) as an optional course which is best subjected to my interest.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have always been keen to become a civil engineer whenever I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
I would go for my professional studies.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
admire the aesthetics of the architectural
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and want to fulfill the requirements needed to present it
physically
in front of our eyes.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to go for long journeys and travel in all modes of transportation and
probably
due to this hobby, I have developed my interest in Transportation Engineering. Studying this subject would guide me in all calculations related to geometric and pavement design. This would
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in achieving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
scores in my final year exams as my dissertation is
also
related to the same course.

I hope I would be able to continue my passion along with studies and would not give you chance to
The usual collocation for "complain" is "about" not "for". Did you mean "complain about"?
complain for
my decision.

Regards

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Huma
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Mohiuddin
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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