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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v.1

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v. 1
Hi Flora I am good and hope that you are also sailing on the same boat. I received your epistle and you want me to babysit your daughter this Saturday. But, sorry to say that I will not be available this weekend. Last Thursday, I met one of my childhood friends, Mary. She is getting married and invited me on her wedding. I already promised her to attend her wedding on coming Saturday. I am leaving for Sydney this Friday for her marriage. It will not be possible for me to attend Lisa this time. You already know that I love spending time with Lisa and she also stays with me happily. Next weekend, I am totally free. If, you do not have any urgent work and it is possible for you to postpone it till next weekend then I will definitely babysit your daughter. You asked me about charges so normally, my fee is ten dollars per hour but from you I will take just 5 dollars per hour. You should also write me about the food and activities which Lisa likes. Hope that you understand my situation. I am waiting for your response and give my love to your daughter. Yours truly Malisa
Hi Flora

I am
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good
and hope that you are
also
sailing on the same boat. I received your epistle and you want me to babysit your daughter this Saturday.
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But
, sorry to say that I will not be available this weekend.

Last Thursday, I met one of my childhood friends, Mary. She is getting married and invited me on her wedding. I already promised her to attend her wedding on coming Saturday. I am leaving for Sydney this Friday for her marriage. It will not be possible for me to attend Lisa this time. You already know that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
spending time with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Lisa and
she
also
stays with me
happily
.

Next
weekend, I am
totally
free. If, you do not have any urgent work and it is possible for you to postpone it till
next
weekend then I will definitely babysit your daughter. You asked me about charges
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
normally
, my fee is ten dollars per hour
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but
from
Consider adding a comma here.
you
I will take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
5 dollars per hour. You should
also
write me about the food and activities which Lisa likes.

Hope that you understand my situation. I am waiting for your response and give my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to your daughter.

Yours
truly


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Malisa
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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