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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v.1

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v. 1

Hi Flora I am good and hope that you are also sailing on the same boat. I received your epistle and you want me to babysit your daughter this Saturday. But, sorry to say that I will not be available this weekend. Last Thursday, I met one of my childhood friends, Mary. She is getting married and invited me on her wedding. I already promised her to attend her wedding on coming Saturday. I am leaving for Sydney this Friday for her marriage. It will not be possible for me to attend Lisa this time. You already know that I love spending time with Lisa and she also stays with me happily. Next weekend, I am totally free. If, you do not have any urgent work and it is possible for you to postpone it till next weekend then I will definitely babysit your daughter. You asked me about charges so normally, my fee is ten dollars per hour but from you I will take just 5 dollars per hour. You should also write me about the food and activities which Lisa likes. Hope that you understand my situation. I am waiting for your response and give my love to your daughter. Yours truly Malisa

Hi Flora

I am This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 and hope that you are also
 sailing on the same boat. I received your epistle and you want me to babysit your daughter this Saturday. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
, sorry to say that I will not be available this weekend.

Last Thursday, I met one of my childhood friends, Mary. She is getting married and invited me on her wedding. I already promised her to attend her wedding on coming Saturday. I am leaving for Sydney this Friday for her marriage. It will not be possible for me to attend Lisa this time. You already know that I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 spending time with Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).Lisa, and
Lisa and
 she also
 stays with me happily
.

Next
 weekend, I am totally
 free. If, you do not have any urgent work and it is possible for you to postpone it till next
 weekend then I will definitely babysit your daughter. You asked me about charges This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
normally
, my fee is ten dollars per hour This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 from Consider adding a comma here.you,
you
 I will take This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 5 dollars per hour. You should also
 write me about the food and activities which Lisa likes.

Hope that you understand my situation. I am waiting for your response and give my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 to your daughter.

Yours truly


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Malisa

5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you will charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. Write a letter to your frien v. 1

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

204 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 5.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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