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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.
The pie charts compare the proportions of people falling into three distinct age groups in Yemen and Italy in two different years. It is clear that Italy had the older population in the year 2000, and that the same is predicted for the year 2050. The populations of both countries are expected to age over the fifty-year period. In the year 2000, just over half of the population of Yemen was aged 14 or under, while most Italians (61. 6%) fell into the 15 to 59 age group, and only 14. 3% were children under 15 years of age. People aged 60 or over accounted for almost a quarter of the Italian population, but only 3. 6% of the inhabitants of Yemen. By 2050, the proportion of children under 15 is predicted to drop in both countries, most noticeably in Yemen where the figure is expected to fall by 13. 1%. On the other hand, the figures for elderly people are expected to rise, by 2. 1% in Yemen and a massive 18. 2% in Italy. Finally, it is anticipated that the 15 to 59 age group will grow by around 10% in Yemen, but shrink by around 15% in Italy.
The pie charts compare the proportions of
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people
falling into three distinct
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groups in

Yemen and Italy in two
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years.

It is
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clear
that Italy had the older population in the
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year
2000, and that the same is

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predicted
for the
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year
2050. The populations of both countries are
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expected
to
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age
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over


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the
fifty-year period.

In the
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year
2000,
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just
over half of the population of Yemen
was aged
14 or under, while

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most
Italians (61. 6%) fell into the 15 to 59
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age
group, and
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only
14. 3% were children under

15 years of
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age
.
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People
aged 60 or over accounted for almost a quarter of the
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Italian


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population
,
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but
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only
3. 6% of the inhabitants of Yemen.

By 2050, the proportion of children under 15
is predicted
to drop in both countries, most

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noticeably
in Yemen where the figure is
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expected
to fall by 13. 1%.
On the other hand
,
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the


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figures
for elderly
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people
are
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expected
to rise, by 2. 1% in Yemen and a massive 18. 2% in

Italy.
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, it
is anticipated
that the 15 to 59
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age
group will grow by around 10% in

Yemen,
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shrink by around 15% in Italy.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projection for 2050.

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  American English
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201 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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