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You have a friend who is about to enter university, and he/she wants you to advise him/her on which subject to specialize in – history, in which he is very interested, or computer science, which offers better job prospects. Write a response letter to thi v.4

You have a friend who is about to enter university, and he/she wants you to advise him/her on which subject to specialize in – history, in which he is very interested, or computer science, which offers better job prospects. Write a response letter to thi v. 4
Dear Anna, Hello, how are you? I hope you are having a joyous time. I received a letter from you yesterday as realised that you are in a dilemma of which subject to choose for specialisation. I am writing this letter to give you my advice. I am very happy an excited to know that you have completed your higher education and are ready to start your college life. I am sure you will learn a lot of things and will enable to develop skills and expertise required to build a successful career. In my opinion, I would suggest you to opt for the subject as per your interest and not according to the one which has more job prospects. If you are more interested in history then opt that subject as you will be able to pay more attention and study properly. I am sure that after studying history you will be able to get a good a prosperous job and excel in your field. I wish you all the best for your future and may you have an affluent future. Take care and all the best. With love, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Anna,

Hello, how are you? I hope you are having a joyous time. I received a letter from you yesterday as
Possible spelling mistake. 'realised' is British English.
realised
that you are in a dilemma of which subject to choose for
Possible spelling mistake. 'specialisation' is British English.
specialisation
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing this letter to give you my advice.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy an excited to know that you have completed your higher education and are ready to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
your college life.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am sure you will learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
things and will enable to develop
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and expertise required to build a successful career.

In my opinion, I would suggest you to opt for the subject as per your interest and not according to the one which has more job prospects. If you are more interested in history
Did you mean "than"?
then
opt that subject as you will be able to pay more attention and study
properly
. I am sure that after studying history you will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
a prosperous job and excel in your field.

I wish you all the best for your future and may you have an affluent future.

Take care and all the best.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who is about to enter university, and he/she wants you to advise him/her on which subject to specialize in – history, in which he is very interested, or computer science, which offers better job prospects. Write a response letter to thi v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
191 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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