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You have booked two theater tickets in advance for you and your friend, however due to some reason you are unable to come. Write to your friend about it and say– What is the reason? – Why can’t you move your other commitment to a different time? – S v.2

You have booked two theater tickets in advance for you and your friend, however due to some reason you are unable to come. Write to your friend about it and say– What is the reason? – Why can’t you move your other commitment to a different time? – S v. 2
Dear Mini, Hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to inform you that I would not be able to join you in a theater due to some urgent work. Unfortunately, the reason of my unavailability is the last minute on call weekend support, requested by my manager. Although, I have informed them about my preplanned weekend in advance, but it seems like the issue is critical and I ought to be present because I am a primary resource of the project where issue has arrived. However, I know, it was me who insisted you to go for a movie and you have cancelled all your prior work. But I am expected to be available 24/7 on call, therefore, it would not be feasible, not to answer the call after the commitment. Hence, instead of cancelling the booking, you should rather visit the theater either with your family or with close friend of yours. I remember, while planning your sister was very keen to join us and we couldn' t involve her due to shortage of tickets. Thus, I suggest you both should go and enjoy the movie without worrying about me. I have shared tickets with you in a mail. Next time I will make sure not to disappoint you with such uninvited interruption. Best regards, Sonali
Dear Mini,

Hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to inform you that I would not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you in a theater due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
urgent work.

Unfortunately, the reason of my unavailability is the last minute on call weekend support, requested by my manager. Although, I have informed them about my
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preplanned
weekend in advance,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it seems like the issue is critical and I ought to be present
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am a primary resource of the project where issue has arrived.

However
, I know, it was me who insisted you to go for a movie and you have cancelled all your prior work.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to be available 24/7 on call,
therefore
, it would not be feasible, not to answer the call after the commitment.

Hence
,
instead
of cancelling the booking, you should
rather
visit the theater either with your family or with close friend of yours. I remember, while planning your sister was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
keen to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we
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couldn&
#039; t involve her due to shortage of tickets.
Thus
, I suggest you both should go and enjoy the movie without worrying about me. I have shared tickets with you in a mail.

Next
time I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure not to disappoint you with such uninvited interruption.

Best regards,

Sonali
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have booked two theater tickets in advance for you and your friend, however due to some reason you are unable to come. Write to your friend about it and say– What is the reason? – Why can’t you move your other commitment to a different time? – S v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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