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Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v.2

Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to appraise you with the current status of my online order from your website as ' undelivered' . I have ordered a book, ' Turning points' written by late Dr. A. P. J. Abdul Kalam, also the honourable former president of India. My order number is A5623, for the ease of tracking purpose and expected delivery was yesterday at my home address - 29, Sunset Street, London. I was completely relied on your website for this book as I have to present it to my friend on his birthday. Due to carelessness by your shipping department to dispatch it to a wrong address as confirmed from customer care executive, now I am running shortage of time to arrange it from somewhere else. Also yours is the only website selling edition of this book. Therefore, it is really important for me to get a prompt delivery from you. I hope you realize the value of a satisfied customer. Therefore, I would like you to schedule the urgent delivery of this order by today only. Moreover, I have paid extra charges for prompt delivery, which was not made by your site. Hence, I am entitled for its refund. Hoping for a prompt action from you regarding this matter! Yours faithfully, Ell Green
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to appraise you with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
status of my online order from your website as '
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undelivered&
#039;
Don't put a space before the full stop
.


I have ordered a book, ' Turning
Possible spelling mistake found.
points&
#039; written by late Dr. A. P. J. Abdul
Possible spelling mistake found.
Kalam
,
also
the
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honourable
former president of India. My order number is A5623, for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of tracking purpose and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
delivery
was yesterday at my home address
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
29, Sunset Street, London.

I was completely relied on your website for this book as I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
present it to my friend on his birthday. Due to carelessness by your shipping department to dispatch it to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
address as confirmed from customer care executive,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
I am running shortage of time to arrange it from somewhere else.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
yours is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
website selling edition of this book.
Therefore
, it is
really
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a prompt
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
delivery
from you.

I hope you realize the value of a satisfied customer.
Therefore
, I would like you to schedule the urgent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
delivery
of this order by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.
Moreover
, I have paid extra charges for prompt
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
delivery
, which was not made by your site.
Hence
, I
am entitled
for its refund.

Hoping for a prompt action from you regarding this matter!

Yours
faithfully
,

Ell Green
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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