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Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchas v.2

Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchas v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to inquire about a publication on Artificial Intelligence. I am John Gresham from Birmingham. I am looking for the latest edition of Artificial Intelligence by Anthony Hopkins which was released last week. The book is still neither available in stores at my place nor online yet. Fortunately one of my peers who was able to get a copy from your store advised me to write to you. I am a research student at the University of Birmingham. The final year project comprises of AI and Machine learning. The concepts in this book provides a deeper insight to robotics which is essential to my project completion. I would be grateful if you can keep a copy of the book for my sake. I can arrange the payment through a bank transfer if that is acceptable or I would not hesitate to visit London store for the purchase. Please let me know the best option. Looking forward to your reply. Regards, John Gresham
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to inquire about a publication on Artificial Intelligence. I am John Gresham from Birmingham.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking for the latest edition of Artificial Intelligence by Anthony Hopkins which
was released
last week. The book is
still
neither available in stores at my place nor online
yet
.
Fortunately
one of my peers who was able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a copy from your store advised me to write to you.

I am a research student at the University of Birmingham. The final year project
Did you mean "comprises" or "consists of"?
comprises of
AI and Machine learning. The concepts in this book provides a deeper insight to robotics which is essential to my project completion.

I would be grateful if you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
a copy of the book for my sake. I can arrange the payment through a bank transfer if
that is
acceptable or I would not hesitate to visit London store for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know the best option. Looking forward to your reply.

Regards,

John Gresham
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS letter Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchas v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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