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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v.3

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v. 3
Your sudden decision to visit Kuala Lumpur is a pleasant surprise to me and as always, your letter was amusing to read. I am glad that you have been able to manage a week-long vacation and I cannot wait to meet you. I would love to have you at my home for as long as you want. In fact, while you are in Kuala Lumpur, I would not let you stay at a hotel. I recommend you to visit the Bird Park, Aquaria KLCC, Genting Highlands, National Museum, Butterfly Park and China Town during your stay in the city. I will take you to the Petronas Towers, which was once the tallest building in the world. I also recommend you to try the street food and do some shopping at the Central Market. Life is so vibrant and diverse in this city and  I am sure you will enjoy it all. After you spend a few days in Kuala Lumpur, you should spend some time at Penang and Langkawi. While the formal is a state and known as the Pearl of the Orient and my personal favourite, the latter is a district and an archipelago of 104 islands in the Andaman Sea. We have a hot and humid climate year-round, interspersed with tropical rain showers. The temperature is between 26-36-degree Celsius now and we have rains almost every day. Bring light dresses suitable for summer and a rain-coat considering the regular rain. Cannot wait any longer to meet you in person. Warm wishes, Mahmud Riad
Your sudden decision to visit Kuala Lumpur is a pleasant surprise to me and as always, your letter was amusing to read. I am glad that you have been able to manage a week-long vacation and I cannot wait to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you.

I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to have you at my home for as long as you want. In fact, while you are in Kuala Lumpur, I would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you stay at a hotel.

I recommend you to visit the Bird Park,
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Aquaria
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KLCC
,
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Genting
Highlands, National Museum, Butterfly Park and China Town during your stay in the city. I will take you to the
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Petronas
Towers, which was once the tallest building in the world.
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I
also
recommend you to try the street food and do
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some
shopping at the Central Market. Life is
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so
vibrant and diverse in this
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city and
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I am sure you will enjoy it all.

After you spend a few days in Kuala Lumpur, you should spend
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some
time at
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Penang
and
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Langkawi
. While the formal is a state and known as the Pearl of the Orient and my personal
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favourite
, the latter is a district and an archipelago of 104 islands in the Andaman Sea.

We have a hot and humid climate year-round, interspersed with tropical rain showers. The temperature is between 26-36-degree Celsius
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
now and
we have rains almost every day. Bring light dresses suitable for summer and a rain-coat considering the regular rain.

Cannot wait any longer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in person.

Warm wishes,

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Mahmud
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Riad
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS letter An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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