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You have recently started work in a new company. v.2

You have recently started work in a new company. v. 2
Dear Angela, I hope you and your family are doing fine, and I’m sorry I haven’t been in touch recently. I’m writing to let you know that I have resigned from my previous company and took a new job recently. You remember that I was working for a consultancy firm and I told you how much I was looking forward to changing my job? Well, I have joined a travel agency last month and the new job is exciting. In my previous job, I was working really long hours and, to be honest, the pay wasn’t great. So basically I applied for a job at a new company that was looking for people enthusiastic in taking challenges and are interested to travel. I thought it is a good fit for my expectation and took the opportunity. I was a bit nervous in the interview, but in the end, I got the job as a senior travel consultant. The remuneration in the new job is better, the working conditions are great and I don’t have to work long hours anymore. Besides, they offer performance bonuses and I would be able to travel to different places and explore many places! I have also enrolled in a diploma course at the University of Edinburgh and started a new travel blog. My parents have come to meet me two days ago and I have plans to take them to show them around. With love, Emma
Dear Angela,

I hope you and your family are doing fine, and I’m sorry I haven’t been in touch recently. I’m writing to
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let
you know that I have resigned from my previous
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company
and took a
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new
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job
recently.

You remember that I was working for a consultancy firm and I
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told
you how much I was looking forward to changing my
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job
? Well, I have
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joined
a
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travel
agency last month and the
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new
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job
is exciting. In my previous
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job
, I was working
really
long hours and, to be honest, the pay wasn’t great.
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So
basically
I applied for a
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job
at a
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new
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company
that was looking for
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people
enthusiastic in taking challenges and
are interested
to
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travel
. I
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thought
it is a
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good
fit for my expectation and took the opportunity.

I was a bit nervous in the interview,
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but
in the
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end
, I
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got
the
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job
as a senior
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travel
consultant. The remuneration in the
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new
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job
is better, the working conditions are great and I don’t
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have to
work long hours anymore.
Besides
, they offer performance bonuses and I would be able to
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travel
to
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different
places and explore
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many
places!

I have
also
enrolled in a diploma course at the University of Edinburgh and
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started
a
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new
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travel
blog. My parents have
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come
to
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meet
me two days ago and I have plans to take them to
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show
them around.

With
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love
,

Emma
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently started work in a new company. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
240 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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