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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v.3

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 3
Dear Thomas and Eva, Thank you so much for sending me the photos of the holidays that I spent with you guys over the last month. Believe it or not, it was one of the best holidays of my life with so many happy and joyful moments to cherish for a long time to come. I especially remember our time at the famous beach restaurant where we enjoyed eating some of the biggest lobsters with garlic sauce and butter on the side. And, talking about the photos, I think the photos we took while riding on the horses at a horse ranch was the most natural-looking picture I have ever taken. By the way, I must say sorry to you because I didn’t write to you early enough after receiving the photos from you. It is just that I got really busy dealing with some new assignments at work as well as moving to a new home, and that’s the reason, I couldn’t write back to you even earlier.   Anyway, it is my turn to invite you to my place and spend some time with me because I think that you would like my new place. Warm wishes, Sophia
Dear Thomas and Eva,

Thank you
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much for sending me the
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photos
of the holidays that I spent with you guys over the last month. Believe it or not, it was one of the best holidays of my life with
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so
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happy and joyful moments to cherish for a long time to
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come
.

I
especially
remember our time at the
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famous
beach restaurant where we enjoyed eating
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of the biggest lobsters with garlic sauce and butter on the side. And, talking about the
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photos
, I
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think
the
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we took while riding on the horses at a horse ranch was the most natural-looking picture I have ever taken.

By the way, I
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say sorry to you
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because
I didn’t write to you early
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enough
after receiving the
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photos
from you. It is
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that I
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got
really
busy dealing with
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some
new assignments at work
as well
as moving to a new home, and that’s the reason, I couldn’t write back to you even earlier.
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Anyway, it is my turn to invite you to my place and spend
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some
time with me
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because
I
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think
that you would like my new place.

Warm wishes,

Sophia
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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