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A common friend is going to the country your friend stays in. Write a letter to that friend to inform him/her about that. v.2

A common friend is going to the country your friend stays in. Write a letter to that friend to inform him/her about that. v. 2
Dear Esther, Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to keep you informed about our mutual friend Linda who has plans to visit UK in the upcoming month. I would like to remind you about Linda, who was our team mate during the internship phase in Canada. We had received help to a great extent from her especially when we had trouble in travel from one place to another. Furthermore, she was like a family to us. To my surprise, last week I received a call from Linda where she disclosed about her visit to UK for a business meet which is held on 15th November, 2019. Unfortunately, the return flight to Canada is on 20th November. I was wondering if you can take her to a tour around UK as she is unfamiliar with the place. Also, both of you can have a good time together. Let me know if the above plan works for you. I have sent her contact details via Facebook in order to get in touch with each other. Please write back to me regarding your thoughts on this by next week. Best regards, Haritha
Dear Esther,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
you informed about our mutual friend Linda who has plans to visit UK in the upcoming month.

I would like to remind you about Linda, who was our
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
team mate
during the internship phase in Canada. We had received
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to a great extent from her
especially
when we had trouble in travel from one place to another.
Furthermore
, she was like a family to us.

To my surprise, last week I received a call from Linda where she disclosed about her visit to UK for a business
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
which
is held
on 15th
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "November 2019".
November, 2019
. Unfortunately, the return flight to Canada is on 20th November. I was wondering if you can take her to a tour around UK as she is unfamiliar with the place.
Also
, both of you can have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
time together.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know if the above plan works for you. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
her contact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
via Facebook in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in touch with each other.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
write back to me regarding your thoughts on this by
next
week.

Best regards,

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Haritha
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS letter A common friend is going to the country your friend stays in. Write a letter to that friend to inform him/her about that. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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