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A builder did some repairs in your house recently and you are unhappy with their quality. Write a letter to the builder’s manager and explain: – What did they do? – Why do you think the quality is unacceptable? – Suggest a solution for the situation. v.2

A builder did some repairs in your house recently and you are unhappy with their quality. Write a letter to the builder’s manager and explain: – What did they do? – Why do you think the quality is unacceptable? – Suggest a solution for the situation. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, A builder from your office came to my house a few days back, to work on some repairs, and I am writing to express my displeasure in the work he did. What he worked on includes a leaking wall and some damaged tiles, both in my living room. There was a damaged pipe behind the wall that was sipping water into the dining area and your workman did a great job by tracing the leakage and fixing the damaged pipes. Indeed, I commend him for the sheer determination he showed. To trace the leaking pipe, he had to break the walls from the dining to the entrance of the parlor and I was quite happy that he found the pipe and replaced it with new one. However, upon completion of this work, he left the surface of the walls very rough. It was not properly plastered and anybody can tell that some work was done on those areas. In view of this, I am suggesting that you send someone back to the house to scrape the walls and plaster it again, and I expect all these work to be done at the expense of your company. Finally, I am going to host some visitors in three weeks time, and would love this work to be completed before then. Please do not disappoint me as I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Okoronkwo Alfred Chinedu.
Dear Sir or Madam,

A builder from your office came to my
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house
a few days back, to
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work
on
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some
repairs, and I am writing to express my displeasure in the
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work
he did.

What he worked on includes a leaking
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wall
and
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some
damaged tiles, both in my living room. There was a damaged
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pipe
behind the
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wall
that was sipping water into the dining area and your workman did a great job by tracing the leakage and fixing the damaged
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pipes
.
Indeed
, I commend him for the sheer determination he
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showed
. To trace the leaking
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pipe
, he had to break the
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walls
from the dining to the entrance of the
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parlor and
I was quite happy that he found the
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pipe
and replaced it with new one.

However
, upon completion of this
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work
, he
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left
the surface of the
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walls
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very
rough. It was not
properly
plastered and anybody can
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tell
that
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some
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work
was done
on those areas. In view of this, I am suggesting that you
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send
someone back to the
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house
to scrape the
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walls
and plaster it again, and I
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expect
all these
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work
to
be done
at the expense of your
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company
.

Finally
, I am going to host
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some
visitors in three weeks time, and would
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love
this
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work
to
be completed
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before
then.
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Please
do not disappoint me as I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Okoronkwo
Alfred
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Chinedu
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter A builder did some repairs in your house recently and you are unhappy with their quality. Write a letter to the builder’s manager and explain: – What did they do? – Why do you think the quality is unacceptable? – Suggest a solution for the situation. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
241 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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