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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.30

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 30
Some consider that being a university graduate is the key to securing a good job, while others think that it is better to have experience and soft skills. In my opinion, I believe that possessing a university education is essential for academic jobs, while soft skills and experience are more useful in business. On the one hand, many think it is easier for most people to find a good job if they are university graduates with a reasonable degree. In other words, having tertiary education puts people one step ahead of others who do not, and this could be the deciding factor in getting a good job. The competition to get into universities and the increasing number of graduates show just how significant this level of education is for people’s future work opportunities. On the other hand, having work experience and soft skills, such as leadership skills and other interpersonal skills, can also throw the balance in favour of the applicant, according to some. For many positions there is an overwhelming number of applicants and, therefore, it is often thought that having relevant experience in that line of work or having acquired useful soft skills that can be valuable to a company, can put one ahead of the game when applying for a position. Finally, in my opinion, whether needing high-level education or skills and experience, depends on the position being applied for. Take, for example, law, medicine or teaching; it is impossible to be considered for a job without the required educational background. In contrast, in business, it would be more critical for a candidate to have soft skills and experience in that line of business so they can step into a position without further training and be of immediate benefit to the company. In conclusion, getting a good job requires a relevant background, either inexperience or education, depending on the type of work and field. People should make sure they obtain the necessary skills or degrees before applying for a job to be confident of success.
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consider that being a
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university
graduate is the key to securing a
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good
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job
, while others
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think
that it is better to have
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experience
and
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soft
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skills
. In my opinion, I believe that possessing a
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university
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education
is essential for academic
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jobs
, while
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soft
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skills
and
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experience
are more useful in business.

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many
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think
it is easier for most
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people
to find a
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good
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job
if they are
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university
graduates with a reasonable degree. In
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other
words,
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having
tertiary
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education
puts
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people
one step ahead of others who do not, and this could be the deciding factor in getting a
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good
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job
. The competition to
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get
into
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universities
and the increasing number of graduates
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show
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just
how significant this level of
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education
is for
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people’s
future
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work
opportunities.

On the
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other
hand,
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having
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work
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experience
and
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soft
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skills
, such as leadership
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skills
and
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other
interpersonal
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skills
, can
also
throw the balance in
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favour
of the applicant, according to
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some
. For
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many
positions there is an overwhelming number of applicants and,
therefore
, it is
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often
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thought
that
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having
relevant
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experience
in that line of
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work
or
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having
acquired useful
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soft
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skills
that can be valuable to a
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company
, can put one ahead of the game when applying for a position.

Finally
, in my opinion, whether needing high-level
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education
or
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skills
and
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experience
, depends on the position
being applied
for. Take,
for example
, law, medicine or teaching; it is impossible to
be considered
for a
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job
without the required educational background.
In contrast
, in business, it would be more critical for a candidate to have
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soft
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skills
and
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experience
in that line of business
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so
they can step into a position without
further
training and be of immediate benefit to the
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company
.

In conclusion
, getting a
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good
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job
requires a relevant background, either inexperience or
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education
, depending on the type of
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work
and field.
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People
should
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make
sure they obtain the necessary
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skills
or degrees
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before
applying for a
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job
to be confident of success.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 30

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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