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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v.2

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v. 2
Dear Manager, I am writing this letter to apply for a job position that has placed in our local newspaper as a waitress. Your restaurant is one of the famous spot among Thailand dishes. Last month, I just graduated from high school, and I have prepared to enter undergraduate school in this spring. As I say, now I am unemployed states. So my parents suggested that I should save much money to afford your campus life before I enroll the school. The tutition fee is quiet higher that my parents expect. By getting this job position, my parents will not be worried no more. Waitress should cooperate together with Kitchen and Hall. The essential condition of the position is allowing customers to feel comfortable during their dinner or lunch. The customers can be served their dishes properly, quickly and neatly. Our family used to have family gathering for a while and I took care of entire dishes with my brother. Relatives did not have any complain and always gave us compliments. It will be perfect to make job interview on May 5th during the restaurant break time. Best Regards, MJ
Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to apply for a job position that has placed in our local newspaper as a waitress. Your restaurant is one of the
famous
spot among Thailand dishes.

Last month, I
just
graduated from high school, and I have prepared to enter undergraduate school in this spring. As I say,
now
I
am unemployed
states.
So
my parents suggested that I should save much money to afford your campus life
before
I enroll the school. The
tutition
fee is quiet higher that my parents
expect
. By getting this job position, my parents will not
be worried
no more.

Waitress should cooperate together with Kitchen and Hall. The essential condition of the position is allowing customers to feel comfortable during their dinner or lunch. The customers can
be served
their dishes
properly
,
quickly
and
neatly
. Our family
used
to have family gathering for a while and I took care of entire dishes with my brother. Relatives did not have any complain and always gave us compliments.

It will be perfect to
make
job interview on May 5th during the restaurant break time.

Best Regards,

MJ
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiter and waitress in your local newspaper. -explain what you are currently doing-describe your suitability for this area of work-say when you can attend an interview v. 2

Letter
7 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resources: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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