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The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010. v.2

The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010. v. 2
the bar charts give the information on the different activities in the evening and the frequency of that one per month among various groups between 1980 and 2010. It can be clearly see that over 50 aged group spent most of their time for visiting family and friends while the online at home covered the least activity that people enjoyed Taking a closer look on the bar chart in 1980, the over 50 years group set aside for visiting family and friends for more than ten time a month which were more than other groups. At that moment, eating out was occupied at the second place. Moreover, eating out and visiting family and friends had the same patterns that people both lobed doing these activities. During that time, people from 26-50 years liked going to movies and shopping and they went there for more than two times and once per month respectively. Turning to 2010, it showed a different trend, the online at home became the most attractive activity in the evening. In addition, visiting family and friends were not popular during the period of 20 years and people usually did not do it.
the
bar charts give the information on the
different
activities
in the evening and the frequency of that one per month among various
groups
between 1980 and 2010.

It can be
clearly
see
that over 50 aged
group
spent most of their
time
for visiting
family
and
friends
while the online at home covered the least
activity
that
people
enjoyed

Taking a closer look on the bar chart in 1980, the over 50 years
group
set aside for visiting
family
and
friends
for more than ten
time
a month which were more than other
groups
. At that moment, eating out
was occupied
at the second place.
Moreover
, eating out and visiting
family
and
friends
had the same patterns that
people
both lobed doing these
activities
. During that
time
,
people
from 26-50 years liked going to movies and
shopping and
they went there for more than two
times
and once per month
respectively
.

Turning to 2010, it
showed
a
different
trend, the online at home became the most attractive
activity
in the evening.
In addition
, visiting
family
and
friends
were not popular during the period of 20 years and
people
usually
did not do it.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter The bar charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010. v. 2

Letter
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6.0
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