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A restaurant has advertised in a newspaper that a waiter/waitress is required for evening work. It has also mentioned that the prospective candidate should have some experience. v.1

A restaurant has advertised in a newspaper that a waiter/waitress is required for evening work. It has also mentioned that the prospective candidate should have some experience. v. 1
Dear Mr Moore, I am writing in regards to the job opening that you have advertised recently for the post of a waiter in your restaurant. I would like to apply for the position as my experience and personal qualities would make me a deserving candidate for the job. Currently, I am studying Hotel Management course at Hilson University. I want to utilise my summer holidays by working in an industry related to my studies. I have experience as a waiter at a local restaurant and I worked there for more than six months. My responsibilities involved taking orders and making sure that customers at my tables get their orders on time. Besides, I handled customer complaints. In addition, I also worked as a bartender at a bar for three months. I am hard-working and punctual. All of my previous employers would be willing to give me a good reference if needed. Also, I am quite flexible and able to do all sorts of tasks. And my previous waiter experience would allow me to easily set in the vacancy at your restaurant. Please spare some of your precious time to look at my resume which I am attaching with this letter. I can meet you in a formal interview to further discuss my candidacy. I look forward to meeting you soon. Yours faithfully, Sandeep Parekh
Dear Mr Moore,

I am writing
in regards to
the job opening that you have advertised recently for the post of a waiter in your restaurant. I would like to apply for the position as my experience and personal qualities would
make
me a deserving candidate for the job.

Currently
, I am studying Hotel Management course at
Hilson
University. I want to
utilise
my summer holidays by working in an industry related to my studies. I have experience as a waiter at a local restaurant and I worked there for more than six months. My responsibilities involved taking orders and making sure that customers at my tables
get
their orders on time.
Besides
, I handled customer complaints.
In addition
, I
also
worked as a bartender at a bar for three months.

I am
hard
-working and punctual. All of my previous employers would be willing to give me a
good
reference if needed.
Also
, I am quite flexible and able to do all sorts of tasks. And my previous waiter experience would
allow
me to
easily
set in the vacancy at your restaurant.

Please
spare
some
of your precious time to look at my resume which I am attaching with this letter. I can
meet
you in a formal interview to
further
discuss my candidacy.

I look forward to meeting you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sandeep
Parekh
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter A restaurant has advertised in a newspaper that a waiter/waitress is required for evening work. It has also mentioned that the prospective candidate should have some experience. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
224 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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