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Visitors who visit other countries should follow the local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome the cultural diversity and allow visitors’ own custom and behaviours. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from v.3

Visitors who visit other countries should follow the local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome the cultural diversity and allow visitors’ own custom and behaviours. 3
Every place has its own culture and it is sometimes thought that the tourists should adopt the traditions of the country they visit. However, others believe that the natives should show tolerance towards the diversity in culture, which results from foreigners visiting their country. In my opinion, I agree with the latter view and strongly opine that travelers are guests to their city and welcoming their cultural values is in their benefit. To begin with, people travel to other countries to explore the place and their trip can be successful only if they do not have any compulsion of knowing or behaving as per the new culture. Admittedly, tourists would not show interest in visiting a place where they need to learn their culture or behave according to their values. For example, if I have to learn German before going to Germany then I would never go there; instead, I would think to visit some other place. thus, tourists should not be bothered to adapt to any cultural aspects. Another reason for not imposing any cultural rules on tourists is because they bring a myriad of wealth to the country. This helps the host country to raise employment opportunities and boost their economy. As a result, it is advisable that the host country does not trouble the tourist in following their local customs and make their travel simple. On the contrary, the critics argue that by allowing the foreigners to follow their culture, ruins the culture of the host country. The travelers bring their way of living to their country and gradually their original values diminish with time. Therefore, cultural variations should not be tolerated at any cost. In conclusion, I pen down saying that despite some drawbacks of inviting various culture in the host country, the benefits of being liber towards tourists' culture are many. thus, the hosting country should be liberal to allow the cultural aspects of tourists in their country.
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has its
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own
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culture
and it is
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sometimes
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thought
that the
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tourists
should adopt the traditions of the
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country
they visit.
However
, others believe that the natives should
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show
tolerance towards the diversity in
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culture
, which results from foreigners visiting their
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country
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the latter view and
strongly
opine that travelers are guests to their city and welcoming their
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cultural
values is in their benefit.

To
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begin
with,
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people
travel to other
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countries
to explore the
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place
and their trip can be successful
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only
if they do not have any compulsion of knowing or behaving as per the new
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culture
.
Admittedly
,
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tourists
would not
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show
interest in visiting a
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place
where they need to learn their
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culture
or behave according to their values.
For example
, if I
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have to
learn German
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before
going to Germany then I would never go there;
instead
, I would
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think
to visit
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some
other
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place
.
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thus
,
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tourists
should not
be bothered
to adapt to any
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cultural
aspects.

Another reason for not imposing any
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cultural
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rules
on
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tourists
is
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because
they bring a myriad of wealth to the
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country
. This
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helps
the
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host
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country
to raise employment opportunities and boost their economy.
As a result
, it is advisable that the
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host
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country
does not trouble the
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tourist
in following their local customs and
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make
their travel simple.

On the contrary
, the critics argue that by allowing the foreigners to follow their
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culture
, ruins the
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culture
of the
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host
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country
. The travelers bring their way of living to their
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country
and
gradually
their original values diminish with time.
Therefore
,
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cultural
variations should not
be tolerated
at any cost.

In conclusion
, I pen down saying that despite
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some
drawbacks of inviting various
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culture
in the
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host
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country
, the benefits of being
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liber
towards
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tourists&
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culture
are
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.
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thus
, the hosting
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country
should be liberal to
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allow
the
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cultural
aspects of
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tourists
in their
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country
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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Geoffrey Willans

IELTS letter Visitors who visit other countries should follow the local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome the cultural diversity and allow visitors’ own custom and behaviours. 3

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