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Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v.2

Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v. 2

Dear James, I am writing to invite you for seven days trip to goa in next month as my brother would not be able to make this due to his railway job. Let me explain you my situation in detail. Though, this trip was planned 2 months ago with mutual understanding of me and my younger brother, however, yesterday he came to know that one inspection from railway ministry would be on triages in the same week. In addition, I had also paid non-refundable advance money to the Grand hotel in Goa, which is nearly half the amount of total booking. Overall, in fact, I am left with no choice in that scenario. This is why I asked you to join me as you are also like brother to me. Moreover, its have been a long time that I met you. Would you join me on the trip? The flight tickets are booked on 13th november in evening. Therefore, you need to join me on 12th november on my place. Also, take some winter clothes as there would be chilly atmosphere. I hope you will join me on this trip. Regards, Vinod Chauhan

Dear James,

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goa
 in next
 month as my brother would not be able to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 this due to his railway job.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
Let
 me This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explain
 you my situation in detail. Though, this trip was planned
 2 months ago with mutual understanding of me and my younger brother, however
, yesterday he came to know that one inspection from railway ministry would be on triages in the same week. In addition
, I had also
 paid non-refundable advance money to the Grand hotel in Goa, which is nearly
 half the amount of total booking. Overall
, in fact, I am This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 with no choice in that scenario. This is why I asked you to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtiemarryaccompany
join
 me as you are also
 like brother to me. Moreover
, its have been a long time that I met you.

Would you You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtiemarryaccompany
join
 me on the trip? The flight tickets are booked
 on 13th Possible spelling mistake found.NovemberNovembers
november
 in evening. Therefore
, you need to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtiemarryaccompany
join
 me on 12th Possible spelling mistake found.NovemberNovembers
november
 on my place. Also
, take This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 winter clothes as there would be chilly atmosphere.

I hope you will You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtiemarryaccompany
join
 me on this trip.

Regards,

Vinod Chauhan

10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v. 2

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

192 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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