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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v.4

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 4
Dear Bella, Hope you are doing fine and enjoying the season. I am so happy that you asked me to babysit Anna for you. She is such an adorable child and I love spending time with her. I would be happy to babysit her for you but due to my exam at the university the next Monday, I am afraid I cannot spare time on Saturday. However, I will be free the next week and would be happy to look after her if you want. I will be horribly busy studying this whole week and during the weekends as I have an important exam next Monday. My term final result will depend on this exam and I have to dedicate my time to prepare for it. I hope you understand that I cannot spare time before my exam even after I wish I could. However, I will be free the next weekend and would like to babysit for you in case you go out then. As I remember, I charged you 20 dollars an hour last time and the charge would be the same this time as well. In case you need my service for more than 8 hours a day, you should inform beforehand. With lots of love. Yours truly, Emma
Dear Bella,

Hope you are doing fine and enjoying the season. I am
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so
happy that you asked me to babysit Anna for you. She is such an adorable child and I
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love
spending
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time
with her. I would be happy to babysit her for you
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but
due to my exam at the university the
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next
Monday, I am afraid I cannot spare
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time
on Saturday.
However
, I will be free the
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next
week and would be happy to look after her if you want.

I will be
horribly
busy studying this whole week and during the weekends as I have an
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important
exam
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next
Monday. My term final result will depend on this exam and I
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have to
dedicate my
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time
to prepare for it. I hope you understand that I cannot spare
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
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before
my exam even after I wish I could.
However
, I will be free the
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next
weekend and would like to babysit for you in case you go out then.

As I remember, I charged you 20 dollars an hour last
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and the charge would be the same this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
as well
. In case you need my service for more than 8 hours a day, you should inform beforehand.

With lots of
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love
.

Yours
truly
,

Emma
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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