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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v.2

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 2
Dear Margarita, Thank you for asking me to babysit for you. I must say that I relish looking after Della and would be happy to help you out. She is such a sweet kid. However, this weekend my parents will be with me and I cannot spare time. I am hoping you would understand the situation and allow me to look after Della the next week - if needed. My parents are coming to visit me next Friday and I am going to take them to some interesting places in the town. They scarcely visit me so I would like to spend as much time as possible with them. Also, my father's birthday is on next Monday and I want to celebrate this special occasion with them. I am really sorry that I am not able to help this time, but I am free next weekend and I would be glad to babysit for you then if you should choose to go out for the day. My charge is twenty dollars per hour until midnight and thirty dollars per hour after that. You would need to give me any special instructions you might have and, of course, leave a phone number in case of emergency. Warm regards, Anna Lechner
Dear Margarita,

Thank you for asking me to babysit for you. I
must
say that I relish looking after Della and would be happy to
help
you out. She is such a sweet kid.
However
, this weekend my parents will be with me and I cannot spare time. I am hoping you would understand the situation and
allow
me to look after Della the
next
week
-
if needed.

My parents are coming to visit me
next
Friday and
I am going to take them to
some
interesting places in the town. They
scarcely
visit me
so
I would like to spend as much time as possible with them.
Also
, my father's birthday is on
next
Monday and I want to celebrate this special occasion with them. I am
really
sorry that I am not able to
help
this time,
but
I am free
next
weekend and I would be glad to babysit for you then if you should choose to go out for the day.

My charge is twenty dollars per hour until midnight and thirty dollars per hour after that. You would need to give me any special instructions you might have and,
of course
,
leave
a phone number in case of emergency.

Warm regards,

Anna
Lechner
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
208 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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