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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v.3

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 3
Dear Elena, Hope you are doing great and I am excited to read about all your recent news. I have received your message, asking me to help you babysit your little daughter on coming Saturday. I really appreciate the fact that you have actually cared to think of me as a suitable babysitter to look after your little daughter, but I regret to inform you that despite my best intention, I won’t be able to help you this coming weekend. In fact, this coming weekend, I have already made plans to visit one of my younger cousins in another city because she is going to celebrate her 21st birthday. By the way, my cousin is a bit emotional person, and cancelling the programme to visit her would certainly make her upset. So, again, I am really sorry that I won’t be able to help you out this coming weekend, but please rest assured that I would be able to help you out in the following weekend. By the way, I charge hourly, and the hourly rate is 200 Rouble (Russian). But, please trust me, the rate of charge wouldn’t be an issue when I babysit your daughter. Warm wishes, Anna Irina More helpful resources: Band 8/9 IELTS Letter Samples with tips to reach this level
Dear Elena,

Hope you are doing
great and
I
am excited
to read about all your recent news. I have received your message, asking me to
help
you babysit your
little
daughter on
coming
Saturday. I
really
appreciate the fact that you have actually cared to
think
of me as a suitable babysitter to look after your
little
daughter,
but
I regret to inform you that despite my best intention, I won’t be able to
help
you this
coming
weekend.

In fact, this
coming
weekend, I have already made plans to visit one of my younger cousins in another city
because
she is going to celebrate her 21st birthday. By the way, my cousin is a bit emotional person, and cancelling the
programme
to visit her would
certainly
make
her upset.

So
, again, I am
really
sorry that I won’t be able to
help
you out this
coming
weekend,
but
please
rest assured that I would be able to
help
you out in the following weekend. By the way, I charge hourly, and the hourly rate is 200 Rouble (Russian).
But
,
please
trust me, the rate of charge wouldn’t be an issue when I babysit your daughter.

Warm wishes,

Anna Irina

More helpful resources: Band 8/9 IELTS Letter Samples with tips to reach this level
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 3

Letter
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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